10:40

Waiting on someone to make up their mind about what they want gets old fast

10:40 sitting on the couch 

Starring at a blank TV screen 

My heavy eyes wont seem to close

And I don't know if you notice anything different 

But I'm ready to go 

Cause it's starting to feel like 

I'm waiting on a lost cause

And you can't just leave me alone

Little strings you tied around me

Are keeping me close

The scissors are in my free hand

And you wont try 

To change my mind 

I've been gone for a while now 

I really don't know why 

I'm still hanging around

I guess I'm trying to keep 

Fond memories alive 

The funny thing is though 

It's killing me 

Things aren't the same as they use to be 

I'm sorry sweetheart

But it's time for me to leave

I'll miss you 

Times have changed though

And so have we

Maybe this is for the best 

Then again maybe it's not

But waiting is starting to take its toll 

You wont seem to make up you're mind

So I'm ready to say goodbye 

Reviews

[BlueLagoon]

Emotional. You really do portray the emotions as raw as you can. Throughout the piece I pictured a girl: hands on her face, jaws clenched because she's exasperated, and getting more and more annoyed every second. Yes, indecisiveness is EXTREMELY annoying and it's good that the girl left; it's not worth dealing with. Which brings me to another point. I enjoyed how you made your poem into a story so I could follow along with my eyes as well as my mind. Thank you thank you thank you.

[Luke Ritta]

I liked this poem a lot.......good work.

[rae52]

really good i understood it from the start

[blueeyeddevel]

break up poems are always fun ;). They usually never get read by the people they are actually meant for. Or are written after the hole ordeal.