The Pit

The Pit

A Poem by Megan
"

Going to a local show to relieve some pint up rage and this is what I hope to see

"
Here it comes
That feeling again 
Bubbling up in my stomach 
With every beat
Of the double bass drum
Like Lava
Destroying everything in it's path
Causing shaking hands
So I step in the pit
Oh damn
I feel like drop kicking someone
Sounds like rounds
Being fired off 
Of a tommy gun 
Nothing but hands and feet
Bloody noses and bruises 
Elbows thrown 
To stop the on coming
Cascade of bodies
Threatening to take them all 
With me
To the vey bottom of my rage
God it feels so good
To release this monster 
Inside me
Another song please

© 2011 Megan


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As the monster screams for Blood, Rage, and Relief, the mistress knows whom is in control


Nice.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nothing like letting go at a show to get all the tension out... a very fun piece of writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I feel like drop kicking someone lol I love it. Excellent work. The pit is my favorite place to be. xx

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

great job...the best thing was the comparision of the inner feelings to that bursting volcano and flowing lava.....

great flow, the entire scene i could imagine best part out of it.
great going

Regards
PRODICAL

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nothing like a good mosh pit to get fucked up in. Righteous stuff. listen to OFWGKTA. i think you'd like their stuff, if you haven't already gotten your hands on it.



Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Get it, girl. Release that monster. (trying to be sassy, failing dismally)

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Megan
Megan

Prattville, AL



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