Broken Angel

Steampunk romance.

I’ve always been that kid

From the other side of the tracks

Growing up in my lonely little world

Of blackened steel and carpet tacks

 

My clockwork heart has taken its toll

I’m an empty flask, a lifeless doll

 

But you took my hand

You saw something else

Under my monochromatic lie

You called me your angel

You called me your angel

 

If I’m an angel,

I’m a fallen one

That mysterious girl

From the dark side of the sun

If I’m an angel,

I’m a broken one

Don’t hit and run

Don’t hit and run

I’m still human

Deep inside

 

You kiss my lips, hold me close

And the sparks fly all around us

All the people stop and stare

In this symbiotic world, nothing can compare

 

The hourglass keeps turning

The fire within me is still burning

 

You take my hand

Call me special

Even though I’m really nothing at all

You call me your angel

You call me your angel

 

I may be different than you

But I am with you

I may not be entirely like you

But I will stand by you

Forevermore

Author's Note

My first attempt at steampunk poetry. Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Shy Girl]

I really liked this piece. You rhymed the words very well and they were just well thought out stanzas...It really boggles my mind how it seemed as though it was written as a poem...but the more I read, the more it became a story to my emotions. Well thought out and very nice read. Thank you for the RR :)

[Who Cares]

Rhyme scheme is great, and i thought this was a poem by the lay out and rhyme scheme. It tells a story and has a wonderful strong ending. Nice diction. Great piece

[Illuminare]

I never really understood the whole steampunkery thing, but this was a really entertaining poem to read. I love the expression "under my monochromatic lie"...just brilliant.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the honest feel of the statements in this poem. I like the history given and the strong ending. Thank you for the excellent chapter.
Coyote

[MandaBear]

It's very uniquely written and creative.

[ravenjess]

WOW, I LOVE THIS.....you should write like this more often. maybe even a novel or short story with hot steampunk guys?? Please? lol LOVE this poem.

[Bridget Murphy]

I LOVE IT!!! It's seems so sad, yet it has a flicker of hope to it!!! Good job I can't wait to read more!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This could easily be lyrical music! Excellent!

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a beautiful piece that lets out those inner most emotions. To me it says don't leave when you find out I am not perfect. I am only human after all.

[Nicholas Antonio Young]

This was really incredible. It's very uniquely written and creative. I like seeing that. :) I also really loved these lines

"My clockwork heart has taken its toll
I’m an empty flask, a lifeless doll"
Amazing description! Keep up the good work :)