Castle In The Sky

Just a little couplet poem inspired by Howl's Moving Castle.

My heart belongs to the boy in the sky

In his magical castle way up high

 

He took my arm one dreary day

And lead me to a world not so far away

 

A place where I was free of cares

Free of unhappiness, though not of scares

 

I felt warm and safe in his embrace

I had finally found my belonging place

 

Then a dark day came my way

He left me along, and he did not say

 

Where he had gone, or if he would come back

He left me in empty halls, I was a wreck

 

I went out to search for him, my love

I searched the land below and the one above

 

I couldn’t find him, I fell to despair

A man like him was so special, so rare

 

Sometime later I found him, alone

He was racked with sorrow to the bone

 

I went to him, held him close to me

These bitter tears of his, I need not see

 

He wept and wept, my heart broke with each

There was something here I could not reach

 

But I held him, and his sorrow subsided

My proud prince’s fair name derided.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think. :-)

Reviews

[Sujash I. Purna]

An idyllic ballad for sure...but the last line has an ambiguity in my opinion...if it is pity or sarcasm I know not...My proud prince's fair name derided? Why derided? It's not the end is it? Or you just ran out of idea? subsided and derided...too machine-like...like someone insisted you upon finishing here...

Good piece of poetry no doubt!
My favourite lines:
I went out to search for him, my love
I searched the land below and the one above

[Jetta Zippora]

Very beautiful. Serene and powerful at once. I love it. Gorgeous write, friend.

[Illuminare]

Some of the rhymes were a little irksome, but I enjoyed reading this poem. :-) It's difficult to rhyme. I know this.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Beautifully written with heart felt emotions!

[Victorious]

Dear Aianarie,

I'm not sure about the last line where you said, "my proud prince's fair name derided." That sounded a little forced, but the rest of it flowed well.

I could see the story in this piece and I can relate to it. I loved the day he was found and the compassionate tone placed in this piece once the boy was found. Really nice.

Thanks for sharing.

Sincerely Livana Lowell (LL)

God bless

[Roe]

very beautiful

[Nicholas Antonio Young]

This is very beautiful. It's so easy to imagine and feel and see everything that's happening. And I also really loved the movie too :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Well written love poem that is honest and true,qualities that make literature
important. Good write.

[pinpen]

Very beuatiful, love the rhyme scheme.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. I like the flow of the story and the description of places and emotion. You create good visions with strong statements and I like the ending. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote