Temple Out

about spinning like a Dervish

Twirling round for days

In a new found haze

Liberated from my mind

The black sparrow turns white

Left with only a gaze

Into our comfortable maze

Let the sun go down to bring the night

 

Shut down

Shut down

Allow your physical self to cool

 

No more roaming eyes

Nothing left to breath

How many stars have burned up in this second?

Captured slightly out of time

Reversing the process of rewind

Moments flicker in tune with the hollow earth

 

Shut down

Allow your physical self to cool

Author's Note

let me know what you think

Reviews

[Heather]

very well done poem about a fascinating faith twisting and turning in a captivating trance.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

Thank you very much I'm glad you enjoy it, I tried my best to convey the overall feelings of the Dervish Faith.

[MOON]

The whirling Dervishes , complete faith and dedication in a trance . Lovely write.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

Thank you very much I'm glad you enjoy it

[kublakhan27]

Very cool...I like the rhymes and the pace, which does give the impression of spinning, at least how I read it lol

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

Cool, I like when people have an effect to the poem, I want people to get in the poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[tamsin]

Great poem...
Fantastic use of discription...the spinning, and rewinding made me feel dizzy, and then being grounded at the end.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

Thank you for taking the time to read my poem, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :-)