Shadows of Past...

A description of a normal human being suffering from memories of past and his struggles to overcome them in the present moment...

He invades me more often,

The shadow of my past...

I am the creator, the sole regretter,

How easily tears my life apart!!

He follows me in the crowded days,

Lurks behind my lonely nights,

Sometimes in memories, at times in dreams,

Jeers me, to come out and fight!!

He sits next to my table,

Where I have settled with my friend,

Watching me joyful for a moment,

Whispers his grim laughter again...

In that moment, I am in two,

The one with them, the other withdrew-

to the chamber where they collide,

One shows hell, the other can't decide!!

O what a chaos, this whole life can be!!

Two battles fought in between,

Sometimes too much, sometimes too less,

Waiting for my chance, to finally be blessed!! 

Reviews

[Isabella Ivy]

This is a well constructed poem and you have accomplished making your reader both feel the emotion and understand the reason why it exists. It makes sense and is a good read. One suggestion: line 4 seems to be missing its subject. I know it's stated in the first two lines, but it appears to me it should be followed up with: 'this really tears my life apart.' Or 'it really tears my life...' Also, because you state in the first line that your concern is 'he' singular, then 'shadow' on the following line should be singular (take off the 's') It becomes clear further Into the story that this 'he' is connected to lots of shadows, so it's safe to keep the form consistently in the singular for the first verse. I hope this wasn't confusing. The poem's great. You're a good writer :) Many blessings, I.I.

[Adil]

Thank you so much Isabella for taking your time out and giving me such valuable suggestions. You are quite correct in the matter of singular forms, and I have done the corrections as per your suggestions. Besides, in line 4, its just an expression of how that shadow has managed to disturb my present day to day life. Like I have reached the point in life where inspite of all the efforts the past still haunts me, and the same expression comes out to point out the effectiveness of the past shadow till this day.

But still, thanks once again for your suggestions. It has definitely helped me. Hope you'll review my future work as well and help me in improving my work..

[Isabella Ivy]

It was my pleasure :) I enjoy good poetry and look forward to reading more of yours in the future. I.I.