Zombie.

Zombie.

A Poem by A Risen Heroine.
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I'm wandering around all restless...

Salty tears run down...

Where am I supposed to search?

The only way I feel alive... is with you..


Your light disappeared in my arms...

The only thing you left behind was my bleeding heart...

A Heart there will never heal..



Your face is reflected in the wet substance...

My throat filled with a harsh lump...

A waterfall lurks around the corner..



I stare out in the blue...

My face is dissolved in tears...

Thoughts circulates about one person...

You...

You and our common future we had planed..



My bleeding heart, filled with stitches...

A new hole prepared from the very get go...

A new wide hole is born...

It will never heal..

© 2011 A Risen Heroine.


Author's Note

A Risen Heroine.
Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always..

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Very nice. I like how you use the italics to bring out th emotional state of the narrator. It gives you the insight of the narrator's feelings of loss and pain.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is really good, I really enjoyed this piece,
love the amazing story behind the write.


Posted 12 Years Ago


The font of this piece almost haunted me as much as the words themselves...

"I'm wandering around all restless...
Salty tears run down...
Where am I supposed to search?
The only way I feel alive... is with you.."
The last line of this stanza was my favorite. Or rather the compactness of the feeling leading up to the last line itself!

You know how to write and i can undoubtedly say that you own this genre.

Keep at it:)

~M.Babu~

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is amazing, loved it...
"The only thing you left behind was my bleeding heart..." loved that line..
Felt it..
Keep up the good work :)

Here's a challenge, write a short poem...A really short poem.. It takes skills to write something with a minimal use of words, but I think you can do it..



Posted 12 Years Ago


This is a wonderful poem, It had a story behind and reading it helped me picture the whole thing.
This is truly an amazing piece and thank you so much for sharing your talent with us. Please let me know what else you want me to review. You have amazing talent for writing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wonderful poem with a good use of imagery. Reflects the sorrow of a heart-break which is not easy to cope up with. Great write!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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TJ
I think this was a perfect title for this piece. It exudes sadness and the feeling of life (love) lost.
Good work

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is real poetry. Using the word Zombie and leading the reader into emotion and sadness. So much strength and power in your words.
"My bleeding heart, filled with stitches...
A new hole prepared from the very get go...
A new wide hole is born...
It will never heal.."
The above line is true. Heartache is permanent. We truly open our heart but a few times in a life. Each time a tattoo on our memory and soul. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


I love this :D it's amazing. I can really relate to this...just wow (:

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on June 1, 2011
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