Dancing On My Own.

Dancing On My Own.

A Poem by A Risen Heroine.



I feel air fulfil my lungs

My heart beats Optimal now

I’m free now

I cannot feel the cage anymore

It vanished right in front of my eyes

Worries grew bigger and bigger

They became a huge parasite

A parasite I couldn’t handle

Yet it's bearable now

I can handle what I have to

I am dancing on my own now

No need to have a partner

Beyond all this pain you caused me

I rose from the spot;

Where you left my corpse



© 2011 A Risen Heroine.

Author's Note

A Risen Heroine.
Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always~

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I am so very glad you became free! Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago

The way you connect things is what i have a problem with, otherwise i have understood the message.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Wow. The last lines have a odd sense of freedom, yet the very last line is kinda like a slap in the face. lol.
Nice write :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

This is a wonderful piece, my dear! It brings with it, a sense of relief. The last two lines stood out the most to me, as they seemed most vivid. I love this piece...great job! = ]

-Femme_Gothique (Brittany)

Posted 12 Years Ago

Strong poetry. Heartfelt and honest is always the best. I wanted this to go on, the ending seemed almost forced.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Nicely penned poem of determination and forward thinking. It's critical to be ourselves no matter how the dissappointment of the past wants to entrap us. Life is still ours to grasp and dominate.

Very skillfully written...!

Posted 12 Years Ago

Death is a way out of responsibilities but there is no victory in giving up. The poem is beautiful and there are times with grace our lives we must lay down, but to the living I say rage on, rise above your pain and your fears and your body mind and soul will sour.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Excellent poem. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 12 Years Ago

This is magnificent. I love this poem for two reasons when I started reading it: one, because you continue out on your own despite the obstacles and two, because it shows the automatic decision of not depending on someone else to pick up the pieces. A dance is like showing that you move forward and that may be the healthiest choice of all.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Oh now we know why you're dancing on your own.
It's a Zombie party for one!
Nice poem

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on July 29, 2011
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