Little Big Blames (The Blame he took)

Sins and sorrows - to the sake of the way back to earth;
Tramp's castle resembling and Houdini's magic's marvel like mesmerizing they were.
They walk past, thee hast, (as one take it)
Else: they'll tremble the horizon you wonder at,
The sky under which you run,
The walls you jump from, then,
The streets filled with the aroma of your suavity,
The bona fide smile your innocent self has,
The aesthetic piffle bygone;
Eschew escapade, keep a bliss in a dingle
That would do;
Diurnal cachet ennobling en masse,
All will be aghast;
Beware, you've been seeing these all around,
Waving gone, you left,
The shadow like a void,
Espying aeons apotheosis-
No aegis for you when you'll dawdle your hand,
At that roof, to your eyes, again-
Nymphs' virtuel acts;
Sea shores, in solitude, sotto voce, and the voyage,
Aspiring ups and downs in them.

O kid! Thee hast or else - they'll tremble the bed when you sleep.

Author's Note

i never wrote it for readers though..so just try to ...y'all know

Reviews

[Chryiss]

The style of writing reminds me of a person I knew who had a wittiness and quite a character that intrigued in how she gained respect while being somewhat, mildly silly. This is the first time I've come across another as such. Lines such as "Diurnal cachet ennobling en masse" and "Espying aeons apotheosis-" followed by "No aegis for you when you'll dawdle your hand" give a great character to the piece. In utilizing somewhat archaic words followed by playful words like dawdle, it establishes admiration while evoking good humor. That charm is the highlight of this piece. I could say even more on what I liked, but I shall limit myself to one last.
The section that started with "The" was so artfully done in how "the" didn't feel repetitious at all. Rather, it was amazing how well it followed with that expected rhythm but to a tune all its own.
And now I shall sink into a dingle of bliss. Magnificent work~

[7's]

that bliss in a dingle; only for me.
don't use it.

[Chryiss]

Haha, no worries, I couldn't ever use it a quarter so well as this poem. I only ended so to refer to your language I liked.