YET

Free Verse

I may weigh a ton
yet afloat, as a feather around you
i drift, till I settle in your heart

i dream of things unreal
yet never letting go of our reality
a beauty, no dreams can inspire

I soar and dazzle many eyes
a colourful kite in the skies
yet I fly with my strings in your hands

Yes, life is bursting with colours
yet I love our grays, our rainy days
blending us in perfect monochrome

I love the light in you
yet I long for the darkness too
so you can glow in my thoughts always

i know we can dwell in the stars
yet find our bliss right here on earth
our heaven surrounds us where we fall

Author's Note

Reviews

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What to say about this one, Monsieur P? It just goes to show that when you are not calling out all the fakery and BS on this site, you can sure write an eloquent poem! Your 'Yet' is a wonderful piece of romantic writing, lovingly describing the union of two souls in both heart and mind. All the weight of the world and even heaven itself is not enough to keep these two from celebrating the love they share. It is the kind of relationship that we all aspire to be a part of. The simplicity of your words is in direct contrast to the complexity of the emotions described and that takes this poem on a journey to a higher plane of poesy. Its an awesome declaration of love and so well conveyed on the page. Fabulous and much enjoyed! And not a collab in sight! :)))

[AJNJ]

😎 Well well Madame...careful or all thie praise could go to my head and I am quite a Pest already! Thanks a ton already.
Love is an emotion I dabble with often and I must say it's one of the most puzzling, perplexing and demanding subjects to write on. The good thing is that there are an infinite ways of expressing it.
I am glad you appreciated this one 😊 and appreciation is always a great motivator so I'll think about staying on and posting on. Thanks again!
Stay safe and keep writing too 😊👍

[Ana Papaya]

Yet. Such a powerful word.
This is a beauty of a poem.

[AJNJ]

Thanks a ton Ms. Ana :)

[barleygirl]

Even tho your message seems intended to balance light with dark, lightness with heaviness, the overall impression I get is that of light & lightness becuz of the way your words & lines feel so hopeful & optimistic. This is what I would hope for in life, a friend who embraces my dark side, but not becuz he/she wants to wallow in darkness with me, but just to enjoy a simple celebration of all the hues we feel & share. I think we should embrace darkness with more lightness, the way your poem does (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[AJNJ]

And thats the perfect kind of togetherness! Thanks a ton for sharing your thoughts on this poem, Ms. Margie. Appreciated very much 🤗

[Jimmy Yetts]

Love longingly and eloquently portrayed--devotion, too.
A unique creation uplifting to read.
Free verse art, poet.

[AJNJ]

Thanks a lot ....,!

[T.S. Ulmus]

What a beautiful expression of Truth, I only wish that I could have written it. You have created some words that should have always been. Love is too often wistfulness and frivolity, but heavyness and darkness is the truth. "I love you yet" is the truth of the matter. Good write.

[AJNJ]

Thank you so much for the appreciation that is every writer's greatest rewards. My heartfelt thanks to you!

[Neville]

A little free verse gem if ever there was...

Neville

[AJNJ]

I enjoyed penning this one. Significant for me in quite a few ways. Thank you very much for appreciating this one sir!

[Ruth]

This is beautifully done, love is a connection and an art I always say...the growth together balances out each other in some ways, lovely piece that conveys a beautiful message :)

[AJNJ]

I love when say it's an art. Indeed, it is! Thank you very much. Appreciated :)

[Eilis]

There are many lovely sentiments in this poem that appeal to feminine sensibilities. The idea of loving the less vibrant hues or experiences as much as the ones that invoke more exciting responses is particularly heart-warming for a lover to grasp. But, my favorite part of your poem is stanza three where the speaker describes himself as a kite in the hands of the lover. There is both movement and tethering. Balance. And that can lead to some beautiful places.

True love cannot be all beauty and soaring, though, if love is to last it must experience, endure and usurp the less-favorable as well. Your poem does a great job of demonstrating how that might look in a lover’s mind and experience.

A willingness to let go and be grounded simultaneously that can be fruitful when the mind and heart are open. I thought this was lovely work.

[AJNJ]

In the stanza that you appreciated, I have tried to capture the feeling of freedom we feel while being bonded to someone. There is joy in growing together. In doing things together and separately. We have to open ourselves and to all the colours and hues in a relationship. Not just the brighter ones. Thanks you for such a thoughtful review on this poem, dear Eilis.

[Aradhana]

Such a beautiful poem..... The feelings and expressions are clear and I can imagine those things told above and jo u said about how she brightens up ur world is just amazing... only when surrounded by darkness one realizes the value of light and u said u want both showing ur love and all those emotions......just amazing

[AJNJ]

Thank you Ms. Aradhana. So kind of you :)

[Aradhana]

Most welcome :)

[gram linski]

the yin and yang of love, without the darkness there would be no light, cool poem

[AJNJ]

Thank you for kind appreciation sir.

[Chris Shaw]

This is a beautiful love poem. So many wonderful poetic lines. Yes, when we are in love we can reach the heights, we see the colours and rainfall is beautiful rather than being an inconvenience. I had such a warm feeling reading these words. My day has started well. Thank you.

Chris

[AJNJ]

And I am lucky to have the priviledge of putting that smile on your face. Your words have made my day great too. Thank you so very much for such a beautiful review!

[Chris Shaw]

You are very welcome. Have a wonderful day despite the pandemic.

Chris