Quietude

Quietude

A Poem by Pestonjee
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We're beggars in love ;)

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In this quietude of today
Have we nothing left to say?
A silence looms and overwhelms
This null and empty kind of realm

I miss our words like clanging pots
That furtive creaking of our cots
Your reprimands that rang through air
Those little things that showed you care

The cloak of Aestas hangs on me
This stillness is an ominous sea
I need an outburst, full and loud
A rumble to dispel these clouds

Hemmed in this airless kind of pit
I look to you from where I sit
I'd rather have you shout not seethe
Just say something, so I can breathe

The winds of love are now so still
My sails are down, I feel the chill
Do blow me off like bits of chaff
Then break in peals of vengeful laugh

So perfect is our synchrony
Your every rant is symphony
I am your mule, just crack the whip
Your foaming cup, do let me sip

A stinging slap, a knuckle rap
Just anything to bridge this gap
This winding tunnel must have light
Let's switch it on and have a fight

© 2020 Pestonjee


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Pestonjee
Better the flush than the hush 🤪👍

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You certainly have an interesting take on relationships, Pestonjee! You must be one of those people that enjoy having a scrap once in a while just to keep the relationship hot and spicy as your Aestas weather overhead. In that sense your title is an interesting contrast on the direction that your poem takes. I guess for you that too much quietude puts you on edge. Some people need some conflict around them to feel alive. I adore your line describing the "furtive creaking of our cots".....such a good description there, and overall the poem flows very well and in fine rhyme and rhythm. Your pen is working overtime at present and its ink is flowing fluently and extremely well. This is another fine effort. As always, much enjoyed by this reader!:)))

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Pestonjee

3 Months Ago

Good evening dear Madame! 😊 Thanks for being the first to review me always. It feels great to be.. read more



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re-visited and enjoyed as much again...

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Pestonjee

1 Month Ago

Thanks a lot my friend :)
A cute poem to reinforce what we know: that humans prefer negative attention over being ignored. Positive attention, of course, is most desirable, but marriage seems to not be conducive to that. Words like clanging pots; that's memorable.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Pestonjee

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much for stopping by sir. I appreciate this review from you very much!
The winds of love are now so still
My sails are down, I feel the chill
Do blow me off like bits of chaff
Then break in peals of vengeful laugh

Excellent words here, I enjoyed this write, quite intrigued

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Pestonjee

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much for liking this piece!
I love a good argument I really do I have no wish for a yes person in my life! I love to be challenged I love to be slapped in the face to wake up those arteries of thought. the security of complacency is for the dead I wish to be alive:) well said and love the form and flow

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Pestonjee

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much dear sir Robert. Thanks a ton!

Most original and I thoroughly enjoyed this clever rhyming offering .. thank you my friend :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Pestonjee

2 Months Ago

Wonderful to have you read this one sir! Welcome to my page. Thank you so much! ;)
Neville

2 Months Ago


No problem whatsoever, my pleasure entirely... and thanks again:)
Silence is never the answer in my opinion, too much is left unaddressed in such and can be taken in all the wrong ways possible - communication is key if a bond is to survive, any type of bond needs that levelling to move forward and to respect each other, ejoyed this Pestonjee_ :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Pestonjee

2 Months Ago

Communication is such a vital chord! Thanks for your precious thoughts Dear Ms. Ruth :)
Once in a while a good blow up clears the air. Too much harmony is boring. Too much harmony means one party is giving in to the other. All relationships are different and some thrive on conflict. Another write from you where the lines flow beautifully and I enjoyed the rhyme. Some excellent poetic expression here. All good stuff Pestonjee.

Chris

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Pestonjee

2 Months Ago

I swear by the wholesomeness of a good old fight :) Thank you so much for gracing this page, dear f.. read more
anything to feel, is better than feeling nothing, great use of language in this, Pestonjee, think we have all been there, where the brooding silence is deafening, and a screaming f**k you is sometimes the best sound of all, arguments show passion, if not love, clever writing

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Pestonjee

3 Months Ago

I agree...unless one has a foot out the door already. Silence can be a blessing then :) Thanks for .. read more
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Another well executed write, sir. Quietude is something that I have been getting used to these past few months under lockdown. It's amazing how the mind can function differently once we block out all the noise of daily life. For relationships in lockdown, the stifling of space has been resulting in many scraps between spouses. I read somewhere that the divorce rate is expected to rise as a result of Covid cohabitation and the stress it has created in the home. So, in many ways your dream of fire and spice does come true. Personally I prefer quietude. I'll take peace over chaos anyday. I enjoyed your poem and the underlying thoughts on the title word itself.

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Pestonjee

3 Months Ago

I hope the lover in this poem doesn't become a victim of domestic violence 😅 He may be asking for.. read more
This poem is right up my alley and I am surprised I didn't receive an RR for this one! Being a street cat, I am one hell of a fighter and there's never a quiet moment at home. I don't know if my Tom is grateful for it but today he did tell me to eat some Chinese bat soup! He disappeared before I could scratch his b*lls! Keep writing!

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Pestonjee

3 Months Ago

Thanks a ton Ms. Kat. As for your Tom, I wouldn't like to be in his position tomorrow. Please be gen.. read more

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