Said The Fly...

Said The Fly...

A Poem by AJNJ

Spin for me a web slyly…

From the lustrous silk

In your fulsome belly

A web so soft and slick

I bury myself sinfully

In thick, diaphanous depths

Forgetting, I am but prey

Confused, blinded deeply

By the toxins you spray

Upon my naked, tender skin

In the supple web you spin

Better than Machiavelli

Spin for me a web slyly…

© 2020 AJNJ


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Love the metaphor here. Beware poor fly of that spider. She spins to trap, to control and then to totally consume. Yes, I do believe there are a few women out there who would do that. There are also a lot of men who would fall for it. Great write AJ. Don't be one that gets entrapped.

Chris

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

1 Month Ago

Thanks a ton Ms. Chris! I agree about the seductive power of some ladies! And yes yes, I always try .. read more



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A well constructed poem filled with humor and yet with a metaphorical message!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

1 Month Ago

Was trying a bit of witty seduction here! Thank you for the great comment!
Beautifully done. I love the imagery. Lines five and six are perfection.

Posted 1 Month Ago


AJNJ

1 Month Ago

Thank you for stopping by TumTumTree :)
spiders are like that
yeah they are,
especially the black
widow.as she spins
her trap

vivid imagery
in this creative
and seductive
piece.i think the
spider is enjoying
her catch and the
fly doesn't care

nice work



Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

1 Month Ago

Indeed, somewhat like a moth that doesn't mind burning in a flame. Thanks a ton for the greatly enco.. read more
she is the spider and she is seductive as hell.....he gladly will dance into her web and lose himself in the silky serenity of her passion.
damn this is a sensual metaphor they way you spun it.

Posted 1 Month Ago


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AJNJ

1 Month Ago

Thanks a ton dear sir! I wouldn't ever mind slipping into a web of seduction and indeed who would. *.. read more
Lol well I never read of sex ina spidery web. This is d first and it rocks racy stuff!

Posted 1 Month Ago


AJNJ

1 Month Ago

Thanks a ton Ms. Tania. Not a big fan spiders lol.
Tania Mo

1 Month Ago

I don't blame you
This is a creative write. On my second read the imagery really carved in my mind. You made something spooky to many, spiders, romantic and passionate. Golden! Tyfs

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

1 Month Ago

Thank you for this great review and for visiting this page!


.............. as far as I can see, this is a very cerebral & otherwise covertly, but oh' so very subtly erotic bit of poetry sir ... but on the other hand.. I s'pose I might just be mistaken .. nah .. it is what it is .. a nice bit of erotica :)



Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

1 Month Ago

*Smiles covertly* Yes sir, it was indeed something quite sinful that crossed the mind :)
Tha.. read more
Neville

1 Month Ago


welcome as always ....

:)

The sensual imagery of this one alerts us to the fact that it isn't about bugs. The first impulse is to say the images are sexual, and that may be. However, the reference to Machiavelli may indicate that the spider is any person who tempts us or plays upon our human weaknesses to manipulate us. That said, I like the sexual version better.

Posted 1 Month Ago


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AJNJ

1 Month Ago

I prefer the sexual version myself...Thanks a ton dear sir!
What a sensuous piece, almost romantic, but of course we know what happens to the fly. Also, thank you for using the word diaphanous, greatly underused word. Nice Write.

Posted 1 Month Ago


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AJNJ

1 Month Ago

The fly is doomed...He was made to be killed. All for a good cause though :)
Thanks a ton fo.. read more
Maybe coz only fly will be trapped.
no idea Indeed is art, but how would anyone ever describe any lady like that, unless the poison only in your head.


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AJNJ

1 Month Ago

Ohhhh....but this is only about a spider, my friend! A lady spider, you know....I wouldn't dare desc.. read more
Orange

1 Month Ago

I am sorry for my attitude,
it has been for many years, because of the wisdom and beauty of .. read more
AJNJ

1 Month Ago

I understand you point only too well. One must weigh people and things from their own perspective an.. read more

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