Why'd You Choose Her Over Me?

I think the title kind of speaks for itself.

 Here I am in the cold, dark night

Waiting, waiting

Contemplating

Was there something you wanted that I couldn't be?

Why'd you choose her over me?

 

Now I'm standing in the rain

Crying, crying

Tears aren't drying

Fearing what the reason could be

Of why you chose her over me

 

Now I'm sitting here again

Thinking, thinking

Always thinking

Of any reason that could be

Why you chose her over me

 

Here I am in bed again

Lying, lying

Slowly dying

From the pain that you caused me

Because you chose her over me

 

I am back in school again

Walking, walking

Never talking

The pain inside for all to see

Because you chose her over me

 

Here's my mind in disarray

Confused, confused

Overused

Wond'ring what the reason could be

Why you chose her over me

 

Here's my heartbeat, steady now

Fading, fading

Heart is breaking

Because I'm hurting, can't you see?

Because you chose her over me

 

You're over there with her again

Fighting, fighting

Then all right

That's why it confuses me

Why you chose her over me

 

I'm sitting in the dark again

Pleading, pleading

Silently screaming

Your second choice now I must be

Because you chose her over me

Reviews

[Prose-full]

i ABSOLUTELY love when a writer "jumps" directly into the emotion of their poem..absolutely love it
------"Here I am in the cold, dark night
Waiting, waiting"-----and the great visual of this

"Contemplating...."---mmmm, love the vulnerability..
"Crying, crying
"Tears aren't drying---love the flow...
"Confused, confused
Overused
Wond'ring"----again..love the flow,besides i love the words period..
"Here's my heartbeat, steady now
Fading, fading--love this repitiion
Heart is breaking
Because I'm hurting, can't you see?"---again, love the vulnerability this shows..you're good..

"I'm sitting in the dark again
Pleading, pleading----love the visual..
Silently screaming"------nicely put..

wow..i have to read more of your work..
definitely going in the finalist column..
thanks for submitting..thank you very much..


peace.love.creativity...it's so in you...
be well....sheandavis as writer...i am...