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Crystal skies fill me with peace, an overwhelming Reminder of Love, Compassion, and Soul. Yet still chaos tempts to guide me further, Tries to end my life. At times i feel that all of my soul is peaceful, and still half tempts me to destroy myself with remembrance of my past. Sometimes i feel, Forever Lost.
I have to agree with Brittany, it would seem a lot more poetic if you formatted this into stanzas. I also have to say that the big font was kind of distracting and I focused more on that than the quality of your writing, presentation is part of the writing process too (but of course not as important). But over all this is a great poem and when I get time i'll be reading more of your writing.
I have to agree with Brittany, it would seem a lot more poetic if you formatted this into stanzas. I also have to say that the big font was kind of distracting and I focused more on that than the quality of your writing, presentation is part of the writing process too (but of course not as important). But over all this is a great poem and when I get time i'll be reading more of your writing.
I love the poem, but couldn't you put it into stanzas like
Crystal skies fill me with peace,
an overwhelming Reminder of Love,
Compassion, and Soul
Something like that. Otherwise, I love it, I hope you keep writing ^-^
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