The World

The World

A Poem by Abhinav
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Our world, just as you know it

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The world needs the people, to sow and to reap
The world needs the surface, the world needs the deep
The world needs protection, and caring, and love
The world needs the olive branch, the world needs the dove
The world needs itself to carry its chores,
The world needs the fields and the world needs the moors
The world needs the sunlight-its rays are alive
And under its rule it will wallow and thrive
The world needs its joy, and the world needs its grief
The world needs the tree, and the world needs its leaf

The world is a mirror, the world is a fawn
The world is an oyster, the world is the dawn
The world’s never ending, and end never will,
And ten decades on, it will be stronger still.

© 2010 Abhinav


Author's Note

Abhinav
Just a random write, straying away from my love and friendship genres

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Totally loved it!
The world... Things like these make me thing there is still hope
Great job, keep it coming

All the best,
Tamer

Posted 10 Years Ago


And….the inmates of writer,s cafe needs you…
To read such poems…
Wafting optimism…and comfort…in each line…
Nice….



Posted 10 Years Ago


Very nice flow. *laughs* The world need a lot of things.

Posted 10 Years Ago


funny, how you strayed off your usual genres, and this was unexpected to see from you. but a nice and well meant poem.
kuddos
Teejay:)))

Posted 10 Years Ago


very beautiful! Contrary to what some have said, I think the repitition makes the piece - helps the flow of it and creates more of an impact.
well done

Posted 10 Years Ago


This poem has a great deep meaning. It brings out all the world is and can be for different people. I believe this world is a crazy insane place but it can be so much fun. The flow of this poem is easy to read and I like that. You have done a wonderful job on this poem. You may have strayed from your usual genre but you did a great job on writing on a new topic. I think this suits you well.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I agree, it would be better if you hadn't repeated "the world" for all but 2 lines (and twice in 1 line). Maybe it would be better written as:
The world needs the people, to sow and to reap
It needs the land on the surface and the water down deep.
We need to protect it, with care and love.
We need to give it the olive branch and the cry of the dove.

And just stuff like that. Avoid repetition as much as possible! Other than that it was written very well for just a random write. Well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I agree with everyone else that there's a lot of repetition in this one, but I actually kind of like it! :) But whether the repetition is a good or a bad thing, this poem is great and I think you should do some more random writes if they all end up like this one :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Can't get worst we hope not. I like the poem. Full of hope and desire of a better world. I like the story and the flow of this poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


I think the idea is fine it is a bit long to be REPEATING THE SAME STANZA

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Abhinav
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