My Friend

My Friend

A Poem by Abhinav
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Another of those friendship poems

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My Friend when I think of you.
I think of all that we've been through.
All the times we argue and fight,
I know deep inside that it isn't right.

I, then feel bad and a lot of pain.
It feels like I've fallen from the sky like the rain.
I love you dear friend with all of my heart.
But now that you're gone I've fallen apart.

I'm getting better as the days go by.
I wish sometimes this was all a big lie.
I pray to you every night.
It's like you're my fire, a burning light.

My dear friend, I miss you a lot.
I still wonder why you were put in that spot.
I know you're in a place much better than here.
Watching and helping me with all of my fear.

Our friendship my dear friend,
we will have to the end.
Friends til the end is what we will be.
Someday we'll be together,
together you and me.

© 2010 Abhinav


Author's Note

Abhinav
sorry about the font, if you get any problems, I just wanted to try some colours

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Beautiful =')

Posted 9 Years Ago


you have created a beautiful thing here and gave value to it

Posted 10 Years Ago


this is cute

Posted 10 Years Ago


Nothing better than to write about friends if you ask me!
Some friend would do things we wouldn't do for our selves for us!
Anyway, I loved this poem, and totally loved the message, giving it over 90!

All the best regards,
Tamer

Posted 10 Years Ago


Sweetly written. Simple heartfelt language. The rhyme doesn't sound like the forced "hum-drum" thing. Thats good :)

"Our friendship my dear friend,
we will have to the end.
Friends til the end is what we will be."
Here, friendship to the end, and friends to the end..its basically saying the same thing and put in consecutive lines. Its your write, you probably had your reasons to put it that way. It just read a little awkward to me.

Overall, its a good write :)


Posted 10 Years Ago


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Very nice

Posted 10 Years Ago


I wish I were your friend…….
Yes I am your friend….
Nice reading….


Posted 10 Years Ago


This piece is very powerful Abhinav and shows the beauty of having someone who cares,the colour is perfect for this peice...green is life always!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Could use some work, but overall it's solid.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I think the first line would be better with a comma after My Friend, and the first line of the second stanza would be better without any comma at all so it won't sound as forced, like Francez said. But it was a great poem and a fantastic tribute to your friend. And I like the font as well =)

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Abhinav
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