Rukhsat

Rukhsat

A Poem by Abhishek Asthana
"

I thought you would be the one to caught me when I fall... instead you're just another one pushing me over

"

Ahtiyat ab kya barte ke jaane bhi do ab,

Caarvaan chchordne ka lamha aa gaya..

 

 

Rukhsat aakhri bhi wo dene na aaye,

kaisa chahat ka ye falsafa aa gaya..

 

 

Shikwaa is baat ab zara bhi nahi,

Waqt guzra jo saath unke accha gaya..

 

 

Nashe se nahi par zaher se to hoga,

Haathon se jaam mere chalak sa gaya..

 

 

Saaye ne bhi to sang chalna chchoda hamare,

Jaise Naakami ka kaafila aa gaya..

 

 

Chand saansein bhi bojhal si lagne lagi,

Khud ki halat pe hamko rahem aa gaya..

 

 

Maayusi ki shehnaayi kyun baj gayi jab,

Unki galiyon se mera janaaja gaya !!




© 2020 Abhishek Asthana


Author's Note

Abhishek Asthana
Here i am adding the english version of this poem just for the convenience of my readers

Translation :-
Now, it's no use taking precautions,
it's time to leave.

she didn't even come to say me a last goodbye,
see what is the outcome of my affection.

but no complaints from my side for that,
whatever time we had spent together was awesome.

better poison will make it easier, if alcohol cannot work,
see how wine spread from the brink of my glass.

even my own shadow has left me,
it's like the congregation of failure has arrived in my life.

life looks burdensome,
i am feeling pity for myself.

why someone had heard the funeral song,
when my final journey had gone through just beside her colony.


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The hindi version brings the real feel of the poem with the tinge of some urdu words .i loved it , abhishek.
The departure hurts, but the sweet memories still, fill heart with nostalgia and longing .But we don't choose who we fall for .kuch log is qadar zindagi ka hissa ban jaate hai ,ki unke jaane par lagta hai ki zindagi hi nhi aap bhi khaali ho gye hai ..life goes on , and so it should ..Glad to finally find some hindi work here ..
-Ankita:)

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

11 Months Ago

Agreed with your views and thought process. I have written quite a few poems in hindi while i have p.. read more
Ankita Dwivedi

11 Months Ago

i also, write a lot of hindi poems but i don't post here because the rhythm of the poem i feel is lo.. read more



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Love fails, life fails, we fail but all these are just the stepping stones towards something better. Your writing is so pure, relatable, easy on eyes.

Keep writing and hope for the best.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

9 Months Ago

Something which is above the victory and beyond the failure is sensibility of people and you are one.. read more
The hindi version brings the real feel of the poem with the tinge of some urdu words .i loved it , abhishek.
The departure hurts, but the sweet memories still, fill heart with nostalgia and longing .But we don't choose who we fall for .kuch log is qadar zindagi ka hissa ban jaate hai ,ki unke jaane par lagta hai ki zindagi hi nhi aap bhi khaali ho gye hai ..life goes on , and so it should ..Glad to finally find some hindi work here ..
-Ankita:)

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

11 Months Ago

Agreed with your views and thought process. I have written quite a few poems in hindi while i have p.. read more
Ankita Dwivedi

11 Months Ago

i also, write a lot of hindi poems but i don't post here because the rhythm of the poem i feel is lo.. read more
So beautiful. btw kis baat ka itna dukh hai apko?

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

1 Year Ago

This is based on imagination... a little bit of inspiration... sab kuch aap-beeti hi nhi hoti ... ku.. read more
Thank you for the English translation Abhishek. There is pain in the loss of a relationship. That is easily understood here. 'even my own shadow has left me' that line speaks to me of great hurt. The fact that she didn't visit you to say goodbye face to face, I have to say was disrespectful on her part. I wonder, surely not a letter? I heard the funeral dirge being played, adding to the overall ambience of this piece. Love hurts, yes it does when it fails it causes heartbreak.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


Love and hurt/hurt and love, both feed each other in some situations, I could feel the intense edge of both within this piece Abhishek, an emotional journey :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your visit and review and also for catching the soul of the poem !
Very beautifully written !!
I wish eveyone could read its hindi version .... It has more feel ...
I enjoyed and felt it

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

1 Year Ago

A poem written with a metered rhyme seems to have more impact in the writing aspect.
Thanks f.. read more
Beautiful poem with lots of love hurt dimensions. Thank you for providing the translation although it might not be as powerful as the original language. You are waxing poetic sir....

Posted 1 Year Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Abhishek Asthana

1 Year Ago

You understand Hindi/Urdu... What i believe a pure Hindi/Urdu poem can not be expected to cast the s.. read more
Sami Khalil

1 Year Ago

Wow. You are welcome. Only Arabic and English but open minded to learn other languages.
Both the versions are awesome.
Keep Writing and sharing.


Posted 3 Years Ago


bahut khoobsoorat hai

Posted 3 Years Ago


Tragic and emotional but a good one..

Posted 3 Years Ago



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Lucknow , The City of Nawabs, India



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