Suicide note of a loser...

The pain and tears of a loser got replicated in a poem..

I am striving in this gloomy world,

A world of despair and pain,

Lugubrious are the circumstances,

& all my efforts are going in vain.

Smiles seem to mock at me,

And tears make fun of me,

Compliments are all seeming to be sarcastic,

& changes in life are sudden and drastic.

I am brooking, I am enduring,

I am fighting, I am crying,

Staring at my brethren with hope,

But no one cares to take me out of this havoc.

Contemplating, finding, searching, thinking,

Asking a question to entire mankind,

Is victory and success are bigger than one’s life?

Is it so difficult for a loser to survive?

Now for me it is difficult to lose and cry,

Instead it is much easy to die,

I can’t afford to lose the battle any more,

I am evading the fight therefore.

I am leaving the world, leaving the race,

I know nobody cares; no tear will be there on any face,

But I have a request; think over it if you have time,

Loser is also a human, his heart also beats in same rhyme.

Reviews

[Rachelle]

This is the reality of someone lost in despondency. You have captured it well. The question now arises: How do we help others in such pain and hopelessness? Beyond expression, what can we, as writers and human beings, bring about hope and faith in those who have none?

[Matching Socks]

I think it's important to listen, we want to be heard. We want you to know. We want you to accept.
We want to know it's ok to let it go.

[Matching Socks]

:) good question.

[The Quill]

yup these r really imp questions....thnkss for d review

[Frieda P]

Tough one here for me, I have three suicide notes in my possession, the real deal. Last line was killer, no pun intended. We all feel as though we are on the losing end of the stick at times, we battle on as warriors to see another day's sunrise. We all yearn for acceptance, yet sometimes that doesn't' even fill that void. Aptly written despair.

[The Quill]

thank you ma'am, for your kind review

[Vidya Bacchus]

Who is worthy of judging another and proclaiming them a "loser".Life is different for everyone and harder still for some others so in my view people are trying as best they can and no one should be so unkind.You have penned this so well and makes a person think :)

[The Quill]

thank you ma'am,
i am honored

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[The Quill]

:)..............

[lovelife]

I can totaly relate to this I have tried to commit sucide at 3 times and life can be rough but u just have to keep trying

[The Quill]

i am sorry ....if it made u remember it

[lovelife]

no it's fine

[michele vera]

When One Undergoes Severe Depression and Suicidal Thinking, that Particular Person needs someone
to truly reach out to them in a spiritual and Emotional Level, especially. Many times The Person Unergoing the depression, or suicidal thinking feels somewhat alienated from life or society in general. That is why we as People need to truly provide emotional love, emotional support and Acceptance of others and our own selves. I always try to make sure to be available to those in my life on a very high emotional and spiritual way. I compliment others a lot, so they know the special I see within them. If I know someone is down and out, I stand by them and listen and try to provide emcouragment to them as best as possible. suicide should never be on a Person's Mind. If it does Occur, I believe it shows a failure in
the structure or foundation of Society. For any one in emotional pain, i too was there. just try to take it one day at a time. don't put yourself down, and never allow others to put you down. Always Live truest to your heart and dreams. Never Give Up...Ever, Things can instantly change for the better. Always have Hope. We are not Alone, Divinity is always at hand within us andaround us. always hold on, and learn to Love Yourself Always......Love That Person Looking Back at You....................Beieve in Infinite Possibilities Always...One Person's Dream is another Person's Ocean.....Find the Child within Yourself Always, Laugh when You Can and Cr when You Need to.. It's all Part of How we Truly Complete Ourselves.Watch a Fairytale and Smile,Cry and Hope for Better, and just maybe one day things will get better.......We Must all hold onto Believing.........Seeing is Believing they say, I
believe even when I can't see. Believe what fels true to my soul,body, mind, heart and Intuition. Always go forward in Grace...Always-------------

[The Quill]

i am sorry i was out from this place....thank you for you kind review

[Mirra]

Love the rhyme, wording, subject, everything! Especially the emotions evoked mixed feelings of confusion and despair. Brilliant poem!

[The Quill]

thank you ma'am

[Susie]

Compliments are all seeming to be sarcastic

I crumbled at this line. I am gutted - conflicted between awe and heartache.
Thank you for requesting I read this one. I am literally gasping. Wow.
Applauding you, my friend. :,)

[Susie]

I just want to add - I am currently battling depression and it is far more a relief to hear words of understanding like these than those of comfort or joy. You. Are. Brilliant. :D

[The Quill]

Thank you ma'am for your kind words..

[sona]

I really loved what you tried to convey in this poem ..Great work

[The Quill]

Thank you ma'am :)

[A. Amos]

I like the message in this work, especially the last line was strong and essence of your poem.

[The Quill]

thanks sir :)

[John Anderson]

Addiction is like this. You captured it really well. I like how original this poem is.

[The Quill]

Thanks sir :)