Suicide note of a loser...

The pain and tears of a loser got replicated in a poem..

I am striving in this gloomy world,

A world of despair and pain,

Lugubrious are the circumstances,

& all my efforts are going in vain.

Smiles seem to mock at me,

And tears make fun of me,

Compliments are all seeming to be sarcastic,

& changes in life are sudden and drastic.

I am brooking, I am enduring,

I am fighting, I am crying,

Staring at my brethren with hope,

But no one cares to take me out of this havoc.

Contemplating, finding, searching, thinking,

Asking a question to entire mankind,

Is victory and success are bigger than one’s life?

Is it so difficult for a loser to survive?

Now for me it is difficult to lose and cry,

Instead it is much easy to die,

I can’t afford to lose the battle any more,

I am evading the fight therefore.

I am leaving the world, leaving the race,

I know nobody cares; no tear will be there on any face,

But I have a request; think over it if you have time,

Loser is also a human, his heart also beats in same rhyme.

Reviews

[Rachelle]

This is the reality of someone lost in despondency. You have captured it well. The question now arises: How do we help others in such pain and hopelessness? Beyond expression, what can we, as writers and human beings, bring about hope and faith in those who have none?

[Matching Socks]

I think it's important to listen, we want to be heard. We want you to know. We want you to accept.
We want to know it's ok to let it go.

[Matching Socks]

:) good question.

[The Quill]

yup these r really imp questions....thnkss for d review

[Gurleen Saluja]

Beautifully penned.. Good work.. :)

[The Quill]

thanks a lot :)

[Moonie]

This is a bit different from all the poems that I have read here. An absolutely stunning read. The end is perfect.

[The Quill]

thanks for the review :)

[Moonie]

You're most welcome.

[Matching Socks]

This is so different! Much darker than your others.
It was really, good, your ending was perfect.
We need to all be reminded that we are all human. Beings with feeling, emotions.

[The Quill]

thank you ma'am, this was in the time when I faced it, people change with circumstances, they bow to success and disrespect the failure...but never think how severe it might hurt the fellow witnessing the change...

[Matching Socks]

*mwah
Thank you for sharing. :)
Stay. You have so much to say.

[The Quill]

:) thanks ma'am , m honored