Finally give up.

Finally give up.

A Poem by Adalynn

I feel so empty,

so lost and cold,

it's like im in,

this world alone,

people talk,

but all i hear,

is nothing,

besides my breathing,

my tears,

my screams,

i've lost all feeling,

i'm completly numb,

its like noone cares,

i cant feel pain anymore,

i cant see clear anymore,

everythings slipping away,

and theres nothing i can do,

im so far gone,

that i dont think,

i could find myself,

i try to get,

back on track,

and once again,

i fail,

i'm just to lost,

to gone to care,

and i finally give up.

© 2012 Adalynn

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Having gone through this multiple times in my life, it seems so simple to just give up. I realize that my friends, not my family got me through the rough waters of life and got me back on the path of reality. As a faceless internet admirer, don't EVER give up. There may not be a silver lining to the cloud, but the rain that cloud brings waters the vegetation. Keep your head up.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Loved the last line the way you've used it as a finality. I also liked the way you've used the lowercase 'i' it adds to the imagery of how small, alone and lost you felt when you wrote that. Carefull with the spelling mistakes.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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2 Reviews
Added on January 19, 2012
Last Updated on January 19, 2012



Cookville, TN

Not much to say. I love writing i am more of a morbid dark writer then anything else. I sing and dance and love to read i love music and i love photography as well.. more..

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