Sonnet I – A corpse on the shoreline

Sonnet I – A corpse on the shoreline

A Poem by Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-
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I yearn for you...

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Sitting alone at a deserted shoreline,

Under cold gale from land of nevermore,

Near fire seeking warmth as visions unwind,

By its shadow chasing specters of yore.

 

How magnificent the Fire's embers are!

Stolen apace by mute winds of fortune,

As they sprawl and vanish like burning stars,

And I feel heat upon my frozen skin.

 

The flame’s trance draws my soul into a dance,

Beneath a pendant of recant history,

With my shy love I share a pining glance,

And sink in her black eyes of mystery.

 

The pendant then fades out, and the fire dies,

A lonely tear drops, and my cold corpse lies

© 2013 Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-


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nicely imaged poem.

the reference could be to a lost love or just to the sea itself...

Poe-ish with the corpse on the shoreline, the black water, like the blackness in my life as i have drowned in longing for what i don't have anymore.

nice work.

jacob

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

6 Years Ago

I much enjoy how you break my poems apart!
Thank you very much! :)



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Nicely done. The imagery is excellent, but the message is a bit ambiguous. Is the corpse dying of lost love, or is it thinking of its lost love as it dies? Or is it purely metaphorical?

Posted 2 Years Ago


I live how descriptive you are, and i also like the way it ends :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

6 Years Ago

Thank you! much humbled
This was very well written. Tragic but you got the emotion really well :-)
Well done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

6 Years Ago

Thank you
i am humbled
s y e

6 Years Ago

Anytime! :-)
Beautiful but tragic :(

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

6 Years Ago

yeah... thanks, Hadeel!
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sue
very deep. I liked it. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Sue
really honored by your comments
nicely imaged poem.

the reference could be to a lost love or just to the sea itself...

Poe-ish with the corpse on the shoreline, the black water, like the blackness in my life as i have drowned in longing for what i don't have anymore.

nice work.

jacob

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

6 Years Ago

I much enjoy how you break my poems apart!
Thank you very much! :)
OMG - a wonderful piece. Certainly going on my shelf in my library. Bravo!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Tarry! :)
Tarry Franck

6 Years Ago

You are quite welcomed and it was certainly an excellent piece of work!!!!:)
A cool write. I enjoyed your penning of the poetic imagery.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

6 Years Ago

Much humbled! thank you
Eric Cox

6 Years Ago

welcome
this is really really beautiful piece of writing


Posted 6 Years Ago


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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

6 Years Ago

Thank you! I am honored
Very nice very nice indeed .I know how hard a ABAB rhyme schewme can be to tell a tale and do it within a formulated rhyme beautiful work indeed .

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

6 Years Ago

I am ever so humbled :)
And you can notice I couldnt help being influenced by David's hidden r.. read more
Tate Morgan

6 Years Ago

oh yeah i never miss a thing in structure i noticed everything It is great .Others claim open prose .. read more
Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

6 Years Ago

I totally, unconditionally agree!

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Tags: sonnet, death, love, sadness, gothic, emo, fire, ember, trance, beach, shore, adam, corpse

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Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-
Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-

Amman, Middle East, Jordan



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