Words

Words

A Poem by thatbryngirl
"

i don't know

"
Standing here lifeless, emotionless
I am expressionless and colorless
Feeling so lethargic, spiritless
Inside I have become so desolate
Inside, I

Whisper and scream
As time goes by I
Can't stop sobbing
I can't control myself

Sitting in this stillness
This quietness and silence
Instead of your loving hushes
The night darkens and deadens

Speechless, there is no sound
No tone in my voice, no music, no notes
To resonate and reverberate
How can I begin to articulate how this feels?

I can barely utter a word
I can't fathom, can't grasp it
Can you articulate, do you understand?
Does anyone recognize, realize how this came to happen?

Moaning, stomach churning
Skin white as snow, without the pretty glow
Pale and gross, short breaths
I hate this, nauseating feeling

Can someone alleviate,
Cure and heal
Relieve and ease
This horrible disease

With my scars I tried to hide
With this emptiness inside
A deathly hole in this heart
Now I'm trying to put back the pieces and parts

Weakened, but strong?
Delicate and fragile
Pathetic, imperfect
Sitting in this stillness

© 2010 thatbryngirl


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A amazing poem. Your words took me to a lonely place. Some we find desperation and confusion. We must find a place to rebirth and release the pain. I like the last paragraph. In life we must be strong sometime. And weak when necessary. A powerful poem. Strong description and story made the words come alive. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Powerful- wonderful language altogether, but the emotion especially was vivid and strong. You might consider playing around with the first stanza a bit though, because I found the words ending in "less" a little too repetitive after a while, even if you meant that to be a strong hitting point. I just didn't really work for me.

Overall, nice job- again, great vocab and emotion.

-Coral-

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow. that was a beautiful poem. rich vocabulary, i'm impressed. At points we're stuck and we go to this state, as I'd call it. Sometimes you just have to stand up and start walking. Incredible write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i may review this again later, cuz im not in a serious mood.. all im gonna say is: nice use of vocab words.

Posted 13 Years Ago


A amazing poem. Your words took me to a lonely place. Some we find desperation and confusion. We must find a place to rebirth and release the pain. I like the last paragraph. In life we must be strong sometime. And weak when necessary. A powerful poem. Strong description and story made the words come alive. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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