Psyche

A journey to the inner mind.

Psyche

 

Take me further 

wings within my mind.

Send me gliding

from this worldly grind.

 

Cut that hidden string

holding back each wing.

 

Focus, show me

a truth fading in

charming magic 

spaces deep within.

 

Search for wits that sing,

"Life means everything.".

 

Soaring onward

surly I shall  find

meaning streaming

leaving voids behind.

 

Don't let folly cling

with its fatal sting.

 

Reaching closer 

than I've ever been

touching, clutching

I'll be me again.

 

Let the outside fling

so my core may ring.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I enjoyed the format of this one, it was different, and yet has your same unique take on rhyme and rhythm. The shorter lines, however, do make the flow a little less lyrical that some of your other work. Concept wise, this is spot on...I particularly enjoyed the italicized lines. Well done.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Sarah! Perhaps I should write more poem with seven and eight syllable lines. I used five syllable lines because they were all I needed to get this poem's theme across.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

When a poem follows a structure of rhyme, as yours do, I do prefer lines with 7 to 10 syllables...they just seem to flow a little better. Then again, you know I am not an expert of rhyme and this kind of structure :)

[Aethereal]

If my four syllable line is combined with the five syllable line below it a nine syllable nine results, but the four syllable line was so unique in itself in this poem that I gave it its own line. Most of my poem use five, seven, and eight syllable lines or a mix thereof in perfect meter. This poem was somewhat of an experiment to see what would happen if I broke my own rule. What seems to have happened is that it interfered with maximum flow. It would have been easier for me to have followed my rule by expanding my lines, but I enjoy experimenting at times.

[Frieda P]

We do seem to have those darn strings that hold us down on occasion, fear of flying I guess, I do like how your magic brought this to light.

conscious of flight
we cut the strings
that hold us tight
fear no longer sings

Silly I know, but I thought I'd return the favor. ;-)

[Aethereal]

Thank for you poetic review of my poem, Freida. Your poem isn't silly at all. I liked it very much. I rewrote it in another way:

Flight

Doubts clip our wings,
fear dims our light,
but insight brings
knowledge of flight.

We cut the strings
that hold us tight,
throw off what clings,
head for the height.

[Frieda P]

Ha I give up, you're a much better rhymer than me...I'll go back to my plain old reviews, those were good! ;-)

[Aethereal]

Thanks for inspiring me to write this tiny poem which I shall keep for myself unless you want it because it contains some of your words in the second quatrain.

[Frieda P]

I think we can share it, that's fair.....

[Aethereal]

That means that 'Flight' belongs to both of us. This poetic child has some of your traits and some of my traits.

[Frieda P]

I like that poetic child, and no labor pains either....

[Aethereal]

WC is a playground for thousands of poetic children.

[Eddie Phillips]

The inner machinations of the mind are a intriguing thing. Your poem had a great message and a rhythmic construction that made it easy to follow. It was a very psychical and illuminating ride to find your true self.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Eddie! Mental health concerns that lead to violence are a major threat to the ability of our species to survive , especially when mentally deranged people possess weapons of mass destruction. Another problem is that it’s the status quo these days that a candidate for public office needs to be crazy in order to win an election. Who but a madman would attempt to please everyone all of the time in everyway possible?

[Tom]

An absorbing read, well presented as always in comprehensible poetic manner, especially as it is a deep, intriguing topic. The sub-conscious and the boffins will tell you it is wise to listen to it ! ( Though most choose to ignore it )!

Splendid write and again food for thought to satisfy the conscious & sub-conscious !

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Tom! Our subconscious mind tells our conscious mind what to do without our conscious mind being aware of it doing so. We think that we have free will but we don't. Deep meditation helps us to be aware of what drives us.

[Inspiring Writer]

Firstly when i saw your this tittle i became curious to know what's that.. now after read this piece, i can say That's all about life :)
well written again dear "Aethereal", i read this piece at night time and i liked this one too, soon, i'm gonna read some more today :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Inspiring Writer! Everything in our universe is about life and relationship.

[Inspiring Writer]

Your welcome once again "Aethereal"!
yeh, i do agree with you, everything that's happening every time is what ....is all about life's activities... We're not moving right now just suppose but it doesn't mean the earth's too not moving or circling... your this write's an amazing one.. and it's totally similar to life's activities...so, hey, are you planning to continue it more ?

[Aethereal]

In some ways, each of my poems interconnected with all the others to form a global composition whereby each is a piece of a puzzle to be joined as are all of your thought poems. We shall both continue what we're doing. All the stars in the sky form the Milky Way!

[Inspiring Writer]

ok..
wow, really ... youse one're interconnected with my thoughts... ;P that's awesome, that means you've a mind too.. Hhahah *KIDDING*..

yeh, why not, of course we can continue by exchanging out thoughts and we can make our some writes too if we do work on the same project together... :P

[Aethereal]

Serendipity determines if our thoughts merge from time to time. All we need to be is true to ourselves.

[Inspiring Writer]

yeh, well said :)

[Aethereal]

I can see what you just replied under my poem, ~ And Still what you mean with it my friend, better to read one right back here, for all is connected, and the psyche here, is a search for a parallel flight, beyond the black holes. It's beautiful to be, and let be, and be in a moment... just the way you capture it is healing, and shall bring you back with both legs and feet on the ground. A great piece to think further about :) Very well done.

-Elisa

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Elisa! The present moment is everything, since it's where we possesess our being. We remember the past as we wish for a better future, but we live in the present, and its the present moment that generates both the past and future. If we're to feel joy, then we must feel it now or never.

And I know all about living the fullest after what happened once to me, ;-) so I do it 300 %

[Jack...]

This poem moved nicely through my mind as I read. The flow was smooth and the rhyme superb. never give up the quest to be yourself, no matter what obstacles in klife you may face...they can never take you, from you. Very nice.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review of this poem, Jack!

[Friday]

Overall pretty mild in tone in a way. Very nice and interesting perspective on the inner spectre :).

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Friday! This is just the art of introspection. Most of what goes on in our head is hidden from us, and it's the real us. We discover ourselves through introspection.

[Friday]

Yes; and you've done a very mindful job with this piece I think :)

[Keith]

Nicely written, probing those inner thoughts, well conveyed.

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Keith! Probing the inner self in a quest for self discovery.

[Mizo4]

its interesting, kind of reminds me of like trying to reach a higher state of mind. Made me think of religious experiences. Good work :) hope ya well

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Marion! Psychology and Religion touch each other through a common language if we seek it out. Many religiious symbols are metaphors for psychological states of mind.