Seemed Different

"what you see through the mirror"

Seemed Different

With every teardrop wasted
The trip seemed worthless
Thin, sorrow and pointless
For years what they had nested

Through the mirror the seen
Hopes not so lean
The other side more green
All that in between

As the fishes pass through the sky
Deep, yet up so high
Faith out of supply
The truth hidden in dye

With every teardrop wasted
The trip seemed worthless
Thin, sorrow and pointless
For years what they had nested

Reviews

[-Scribe in Style-]

Intense!
I like how the second stanza branches out from a well known proverb.
Well done
A

[Rida Sarwar]

no words dude! you write so perfect! ;)

[Ahena MK]

thanks a lottt !!!

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Wow, I'm lost for words.

Kaze~ :-)

[Ahena MK]

thanks a lot kaze !!!

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[Saddam]

As the fishes pass through the sky
Deep, yet up so high
Faith out of supply
The truth hidden in dye.

Excellent write dear friend. A very interesting piece.

[Ahena MK]

thankyou !!

[Richard Layne]

I like the imagery and the repetition of the first and last stanzas

[Ahena MK]

thanks for reading !!!

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is a wonderful write and was interesting to read. Great work.

[Ahena MK]

Thanks a lot

[s y e]

Very good... I think we see someone different when we look in the mirror, a different perspective of life.

[Ahena MK]

ya you are right !!! thanks for reading !!!

[writ rajat]

very nice can i steal some words

[Ahena MK]

haahahah most welcome :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this too, again a bit confused over the rhyme structure.

[Ahena MK]

oh ill check that out !!! thanks for reading

[Frieda P]

Convoluted at best, sometimes it never makes any sense, I quite like this one Ahena, one of my favorite of yours....well done!

[Ahena MK]

thank you !!