Can't you see it .... clear in my eyes?

Can't you see it .... clear in my eyes?

A Poem by Ahmed Tokyo
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To a Girl I've truely loved =)

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You don't know my feeling.
and i can't even vocalize
the feeling deep inside ...
you totally captured my mind

Can't you see it .... clear in my eyes?

I tremble when i'm near you
Heart is feeling so ripe
and i want you with an urgency
that i just can't describe.

I reached out to touch you
I wish that you'd realize
How much i want and need you?
and silence is all what i can do

Can't you see it sparkling in my eyes?

I long to tell you the inside
but so scared of your reply
as i don't know what you hide

Terrified like a child
I have become paralyzed.

your love grew claws suddenly
and without warning,
clamped around my heart
and left him bleeding in mourning

Can't you see it .... clear in my eyes?

The camouflaged emotions
Lead to pain and silent cries.
And yet i just can't tell you.
Don't you see it in my eyes?

I just want to look in your eyes ...
and feel like i am in paradise

 


can't you see me .. right there by your side
this is my dilemma .. so just tell me ...

haven't you ever seen it in my eyes ?!!

© 2011 Ahmed Tokyo


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Powerful write

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's good, but it needs a bit of work. Again, the typos are really bothering me, and the message of your piece isn't altogether clear. It's kind of difficult to follow, and that will leave readers confused as to what you're trying to say. Just proofread this, use spellcheck, and try to clarify your points. Good job. :3

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Tags: romance, love

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Ahmed Tokyo
Ahmed Tokyo

Cairo, Egypt



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