#YOU & ME!!

When there's a silence  between you and me

i think it speaks much aloud

but you  can't hear?!?

When there's silence between you and them 

you go wild and push hard to know.....

THEN  WHY CAN'T YOU HEAR MINE?!?

When i'm in pain and i need your help

but you can't see?!?

When they are in pain and need your help

you'll give all your best 

THEN WHY CAN'T YOU SEE MINE?!?

When i flash a smile at you

even though i'm dying inside

but you won't feel it?!?

when they flash a smile at you

and pretend that everythin's fine 

you can sense it.....you can feel it....

THEN WHY CAN'T YOU FEEL MINE?!?

Man,it's not that hard.......

it's just that,

both of us are makin' it hard.....

or may be we are incompatible .......

Author's Note

i hope all of you like this piece of writing of mine nd would leave constructive reviews for my scope of improvement nd plz try to ignore grammatical errors!!!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong flow of thoughts. You made the reader think about the statements written. The ending is correct. Maybe this person don't care about us and we must move on. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[anonymous_at]

Thanks a lot for considering my s****y work (acc. to me and few ppl😂) as amazing...hope i keep on improving and keep on doing best...and yeah i did try to forget that person but all in vain....

[Coyote Poetry]

Your work is not s****y. You write how you think. This is wonderful. Best words. Are free-flow and true. You are welcome. I enjoy your work. If you get a chance. Read Leonard Cohen poetry. No format and wonderful.

[anonymous_at]

Thanks a lot :)..... Your reviews are quite helpful...

[Coyote Poetry]

I'm glad. Perfect flow of words. Don't mean, they are meaningful. Write what you feel. We can edit later. Meaningful words and thoughts. Are worthy poetry.

[anonymous_at]

Thanks for encouraging....it means a lot to me... :)

[Haneefah]

wow, nice piece anonymous.
i am new too, i hope you will take out time to help me out.
Trust me when i say this piece is nice!

[anonymous_at]

Thanks a lot for encouraging me...and sorry i have been very busy for last few months ....so i didn't come online.....and now i'm trying review all the read requests first so have little patience. I will surely review your work asap..... :)

[conversations with her ..]

i can definitely relate to this one, you're amazing.

I'm new on here, so it would be an honour if you could review some of my poems!

[anonymous_at]

Thanks..... It's great to see that.... People can relate to my poem..... And ya for sure... I'll review your poems asap......
:)

[Avia]

I think this is a very relatable poem. Feeling like you're not noticed or not as important in a loved one's life can really hurt. I sense the tone of the poem as anger and shouting through your use of exclamation points. Well done, this is very nice. Just correct your words, like nd, u and all those. O like this

[anonymous_at]

thank you very much for your positive review and for taking out your time to read my poem.......and i will surely try not to use abbreviations ........ :).....and ya it's good to see that people can find out the true nd deep feelings out of my poem

[Avia]

It was my pleasure :)

[anonymous_at]

Well then thanks......... :)

[Ariya]

Amazing work, I can relate to it.

[anonymous_at]

well...it's nice to hear that someone out there can relate it to..btw thnks a lot for ur review ..... :)

[wordman]

sometimes we take advantage of each other not really knowing

[anonymous_at]

Well that do happen... But doing it for way too long is not a good idea nd that too if other one points out being used nd u still use her nd call urself "best friend " then that's wrong.... Isn't it

[wordman]

it is,time to tell him so long

[anonymous_at]

I told her* nd only conclusion we could come up to was... That we should part our ways...

[wordman]

sometimes it`s just more healthy to say good bye and start new,a new love,a new road to travel
my poem you and me is a little like each others

[anonymous_at]

Well ya... U r right.. But leaving behind unanswered is wrong..

[wordman]

so you are craving punishment then,,right

[anonymous_at]

No it's not like that.... I mean I'm the one who had been suffering before nd now also I'm the only one who is still suffering... So i want her to pay back now..

[wordman]

just walk away and forget it,she will suffer even worse

[anonymous_at]

Ya... But all I'm seeing is that she's getting more frnds nd is happy nd is no longer under depression.... Nd on the other hand I'm getting more heartless day by day nd my doctor told me that i need to take medicines coz I'm under depression...

[wordman]

well i got some valium,,lol

[anonymous_at]

Great.... :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Strange a story between two hearts in love. But you portrait it very nice. Great one!

[anonymous_at]

Thnk u very much but it's was actually a true story which happened with me nd my best frnd :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

That's great to know. Hope you have found a way to work it out.

[anonymous_at]

Well unfortunately.... We tried thousand times but at the end we realized.... Parting our ways is the best solution...

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Sorry to hear that.

[anonymous_at]

It's ok... We can't change... What's written in our fate... Right!!!?!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Fate, Destiny, luck not my cup of tea. I believe we really get everything we deserve and best in life. Believe in God he will surely gift you the best surprise of your life one day.

[anonymous_at]

Nd i hope that... That one day will show up on my very last day or maybe later....

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Common "stay hungry, stay foolish" courtesy Mr.Steve Jobs not I lol

[anonymous_at]

Well point accepted.... but its another way of perceiving it..

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Thanks for accepting :)

[anonymous_at]

Lmao.... What else could i say....

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

:)....what else could I reply....

[anonymous_at]

Good point...

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Thanks :)....

[anonymous_at]

welcome......

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Really??????

[anonymous_at]

Wht else could i say....

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Nothing else i expect.... :)

[anonymous_at]

Great then...

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Great here....

[anonymous_at]

Lmao then...

[anonymous_at]

i hope all of you like this piece of writing of mine nd would leave constructive reviews for the scope of my improvement :)