A Poem by Aka_Kitsune

a very negative poem one might say, well it was on my mind and if its that bad dont review. if you like it please say, thank you all

Say what you gonna say
i don't care anyway

where will you be in ten years
under a f*****g bridge

i may not be the best in school
but at least i'm not the average fool

aquirring more fans
b***h at least i have plans

you may not appreciate my vocabulary
but when i'm pissed my mood may be scary

i may not be perfect
however give me a sec

to explain the situation
your going to need a translation

have you noticed that game they play?
they gonna say what they gonna say

© 2012 Aka_Kitsune

Author's Note

pretty negative? well i was extremely stressed and most of my poems are written at night when my bad mood and wandering mind comes out more. if you like please say

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im speechless its wonderfull

Posted 8 Years Ago

Not bad but there's a few criticisms I have. One, if you're trying to keep a rhyme scheme going the bridge/years thing doesn't work at all. Secondly, it might be better to explain your situation. You just seem pissed but it's a little too cryptic to invest in. Otherwise, good job. Keep it up

Posted 8 Years Ago

As my friend and I say, "Haters are gonna hate!"

Aha. Negative but honest.

Nice write.

Posted 8 Years Ago

It is pretty negative, but you're right: "they gona say what they gona say"

Posted 8 Years Ago

Hey, people gotta do what they gotta do, as you have all the right to express you. You put it together in a nice way. Everybody has felt this way once in there life. Especially, in school with different attitudes floating around a group of people like birds in the fog. Keep writing! Good job. It was a powerful easy read. I enjoyed it.

Posted 8 Years Ago

this defiantly was a powerful poem. you can really feel your emotion in this poem. great write :)

Posted 8 Years Ago

this poem's not bad at all. i can really feel your negativity in your word choice, and its still a nice poem. you were really good at showing your emotion through this. good job! ^_^

Posted 8 Years Ago

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Added on March 2, 2012
Last Updated on March 5, 2012
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my real name is Shawn Jewell, i wish to make a small name for myself & perhaps make a friend or two as i continue writing :) i mostly write poetry but i am in the process of working on a book :D .. more..

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A Poem by Aka_Kitsune


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