Tattoo

just trying to be a little more clear in my negative poetry about why things are bothering me...hope i was guys without being blunt haha

I grip my pen
prepared to add names
to my ever growing s**t list
why am i so mad?

i want to be treated normally
i don't know how
but i offended everyone
made you single me out

like i am branded with a tattoo
forming a barrier between
me & you all 
that yells for you to turn from me

I'm about to lose my mind
its been this way for so long
i just wanted to fit in with the throng
what the f**k did i do wrong?!

i tried to make friends
to help those who needed
you all still stay away
treating me like a pest

take the tattoo off!
i want to be someone
not laughed at & told on
for things that weren't wrong

threaten to throw me out
for wiping my girlfriends tears
when she cries about stress
most of it caused by you!

how is that wrong?
will this ever end
or will it stay branded
like a tattoo...

Author's Note

please review i put a lot of work into this one especially :) thanks guys

Reviews

[Graggz]

wow this poems is very emotional , you`ve expressed it with a good collection of words , its wonderful

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is a wonderful way to release your emotions...you've expressed yourself perfectly... Well done!

[Marie]

The "tattoo" is a great way to express this feeling of being cast out.

[Dark Aeris]

A strong piece. As for making things more clear about what's wrong, as long as you can get your feelings across.. and, as I sometimes use writing to vent, don't worry so much about anything else. Sometimes raw emotion can paint a picture better than refined emotion.

Regardless, you can tell the effort you put into this and for that it deserves merit. Amazing piece.

[Silver_Anime]

what a very strong poem :) i can tell you worked really hard on this one. and your choice of words really bring out your emotions.
nice job ^_^ i like it a lot!

[Tomislav Petricevic]

The amount of work you put into your poem can really be seen! Your words are so true. I like it very much :D

[MandaBear]

this is very good. i loved the emotion in this:) i want to be like a tattoo now lol at least a nice one!