Loose

Loose

A Poem by Allison
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Put in some effort, people!

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Here in my hand I have my heart
With fingers slightly apart,
Everyone sees the outside,
But they think I am trying to hide,
I allow them to pry my fingers open,
But they do not even peer in,
The information stays in the dark;
On my hands, there is barely a mark,
I offer my loosened hand to them,
But they do not think it is a gem.
"Do they think it is solid?"
I ask, looking at the loose lid,
There has to be someone willing to enter,
But will they try to reach the center?

© 2013 Allison


Author's Note

Allison
Tell me what you think. I am not much for poetry, but I do try it now and then.

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I really like this poem, the rhyme scheme is fantastic and the message isn't lost inside them but instead carries it better. My FAV lines are the last two
"There has to be someone willing to enter,
but will they try to reach the centre?"
I believe you have talent 8D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I really like this poem, the rhyme scheme is fantastic and the message isn't lost inside them but instead carries it better. My FAV lines are the last two
"There has to be someone willing to enter,
but will they try to reach the centre?"
I believe you have talent 8D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yes. Who will reach the center or your heart. Nice short write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the images you create. I can tell you have a lot to say...

I think you worry too much. Let yourself make a mistake . This is a supportive place. Take a chance....

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There should be a love button on here xD You should write more poetry, because you are really good with it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on October 19, 2011
Last Updated on October 23, 2013
Tags: lonely, free, open, loose, heart, hand, shy, misunderstood, love, please, beg, try, attempt, effort

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