God's Greatest Creation

God's Greatest Creation

A Poem by Akshat♥
"

No one understands you better than your mom...

"



She is special
Lovely and graceful

She gives a helpful hand when in need
She is great indeed 

Just think and she is already there 
With a big heart and care

She has many responsibilities and burdens
Which we can't even imagine

She gives all her time to those she loves dearly
And never complains or gets angry

She is beautiful and alive! 
She is the one 
Only one
Without whom we can't survive

She can consume all the pain
And will never have someone to blame

She hides all the pain 
Perhaps,"she would not want to appear constrained"

She is the tree that you lean upon,
She is the solution when you feel withdrawn

She is the heart that beats inside you,
Which you can't miscue

She lives with you,
She lives for you,
She feels for you,
For her loved ones she would die
Until we have children,we can't know why



© 2013 Akshat♥


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Akshat♥
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This is wonderful, ever so awesome written

Posted 1 Year Ago


That was something wonderful

:)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Akshat♥

3 Years Ago

Thank you.
Aw, what a sweet piece. =)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Akshat♥

6 Years Ago

Thank you misha :)
A sweet poem but don't you think a little too sweet indicating a one sided version? Mothers also discipline and there is some tough love in the process and some friction as one grows which is what makes that relationship worth it or not. Just a sweet, loving, long suffering mother does not make good citizens! It would be good to express the wholesomeness. She better be the teacher of compassion, integrity, generosity, fair play, etc., or else it is like many people who should one feels go through a degree and get a licence before having children!
Hence I do not agree with the last two lines:
For her loved ones she would die
Until we have children,we can't know why
For then it sounds mafia like and it wipes out the amazing work of people like Mother Teresa! Having children is not the only way one dies for others!
Knowing your ability to write I would like to see you get to the meat of subjects!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Akshat♥

6 Years Ago

Thank you :)
You're welcome.

Beautiful poem.
Love the the last 3 stanzas.

Keep exercising your talent.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Akshat♥

6 Years Ago

Thank you :)
This is very sweet.
Keep up the good work :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Akshat♥

7 Years Ago

Thank you:)
nice write... keep writing.. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Akshat♥

7 Years Ago

Thank you:)
I love the end of the poem :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Akshat♥

7 Years Ago

Thank you:)
I was confused when I initially read it because I didn't read the tagline to know that you were talking about your mother, but the poem was very sweet and I'm sure your mother would greatly appreciate it. I love my mother, and I don't know what I'd do without her. Good job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Akshat♥

7 Years Ago

Thank you:)
Quite an excellent tribute to your mom.If my kids wrote this for me i would be very proud.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Akshat♥

7 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Vidya Bacchus

7 Years Ago

You are welcome:)

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