You made me

You made me

A Poem by Akshat♥
"

one person can become your world

"
















You cry
I cry

You happy
I happy

Your lips, my biggest weakness
Your Smile, my biggest distraction

If you need me 
I'll come running
from million miles away
Just to see you one last time
One last feeling closer to you

I won't ever hesitate to give you more
If you need something let me know
I will do everything to make you happy
to bring a smile, a sweet smile

You cry
I cry

You happy
I happy

You made me spin on my feet
You made me feel heaven in hell
You made me believe that i can live happily
You made me a person that i never was...

You are everything i had
Your one touch can do miracle
Your one effort can solve hardest problem
Without you i am nothing...

You cry
I cry

You happy
I happy

© 2013 Akshat♥


Author's Note

Akshat♥
i write that i feel like doing it..
you decide that you like it or not...

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I like how the people in this poem seem to be connected, intertwined. and how the repetition of the words "you cry i cry" and "you happy i happy" seem to strengthen that. it makes me get the feeling that these people were in love in an interconnected way, and they are a part of each other, a love that can't be broken. i love the feeling this poem brings. togetherness.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like the repetition in this poem.. it creates a sing-song effect. I also love the overall theme of this.. love, happiness, joy, with just a touch of sadness. Spelling error here:

Your one tough can do miracle -- tough should be touch

Great job.



Posted 6 Years Ago


Akshat♥

6 Years Ago

Thank you dear :)
Picture says it all :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Akshat♥

6 Years Ago

Maybe..maybe not!
Thank you dear :)
True love :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


nice..

Posted 7 Years Ago


love these lines...
"You made me spin on my feet
You made me feel heaven in hell
You made me believe that i can live happily
You made me a person that i never was..."
written really really well....jus amazing..

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You cry
I cry
You happy
I happy
those lines are just awesome :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lovely


Posted 8 Years Ago


I love this poem!
Well written!
These lines make the poem intense:

You cry
I cry
You happy
I happy

They strengthen the emotion and build a connection between two people.

Your lips, my biggest weakness
Your Smile, my biggest distraction

My favorite lines...
Well written

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

really good it sound like a song

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like how the people in this poem seem to be connected, intertwined. and how the repetition of the words "you cry i cry" and "you happy i happy" seem to strengthen that. it makes me get the feeling that these people were in love in an interconnected way, and they are a part of each other, a love that can't be broken. i love the feeling this poem brings. togetherness.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Akshat♥
Akshat♥

New Delhi, India



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