Voices

Sometimes voices disturb us or give us a path where we get involved deeply...

Voices echos in my mind
making my thoughts wild.

Voices sharpen the situation
diminishing the silence around.

Situation getting worse and

I am going crazier every second.

These voices are harder to stop
trying is also a waste of time.

These voices wants to say something
about life
about struggle
about childhood
about peer pressure
about a bright future
about responsibilities
about everything ...

These situations made me think harder

Are these things crazier
or I am believing in them.

Hard to try
Hard to find
these voices are making me blind.

Some voices making me strong
giving me experience in this
field of ignorance.

Balancing the situation between
bad and good voices,
I throw myself in this field of choices.

Wish me good luck
Wish me a bright future
these voices cannot break me apart
Since in every road there are many paths.

I will make my own voice for others
to compete and destroy these bad voices.

Author's Note

please review and rate this piece..
i will really appreciate it..

Reviews

[Becky C Strukamp]

Great poem. Those pesky voices. I like the way you structured the stanzas and used color. Our inner voice to me, Is something that our gut feels warning us or saying yes this feels right. Sometimes those voices are good you just have to be in tune and follow the positive. Love the poem.

[Kate Hunter]

I love this. It reminds me of a music professor who talks about how everyone has two voices. One is positive, and the other is pessimistic and very discouraging. It's our choice to decide which one we will listen to.

[Akshat♥]

You are absolutely right here dear :)
Thank you :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Oh yes.. those voices.. they are so plaguing. I love the imagery in this piece and the flow of repetition used with the voices. These lines however make no sense to me at all and I have no clue how to tell you to fix them and make them better:

Is these things are crazier
or i am making one.

The only thing I can tell you is: Are these things crazier -- is correct grammar
Good luck with that...

Nice poem overall. Good job.

[Akshat♥]

In these lines i wanted to say that these voices are crazier or i am making myself crazier by thinking about these inner voices... :D i know these lines have less meaning in real life..but
for me..these are my feelings :)
Thank you dear :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Okay, how about trying this:

Are these voices crazy
or am I for listening to them

[Akshat♥]

"listening"...no ...something else..tell me something else :P

[Ravyne Hawke]

"believing in them" or "encouraging them" or "needing them"

[Akshat♥]

believing in them seems nice...lets add that ;)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Sounds like a plan =)

[Akshat♥]

I wish it could be ;)

[beautiful life]

I never thought about this..
Different yet lovely write up!

[Akshat♥]

Thank you dear :)

[Anuvart]

Really different write up!!
it is nice that you see your inner self:)

[Hitman]

I really liked it:)

[sudeshna]

i really liked it...

[Nupur]

nice

[Elizabeth Marie O'neil-..]

"The Road Not Taken" by Robert Frost popped into my mind when I read this. I'm not quite sure why...

[Akshat♥]

I don't know...I write whatever I like..

[Amber "Victoriomantic" ..]

Voices can be used for many things, including for good or for ill. If I may make some suggestions, review and edit this piece as there are a few missing capital letters (such as the lowercase "I" in line 19). Also, the first line would make more sense if it were to say "echo" as "Voices echo[e]s" doesn't make sense. Lovely piece though!

[Akshat♥]

I will keep your points in mind :)

[kaylynnmelody♥]

great poem... oh those voices.. they are always here! haha i never know how to get rid of them.. i guess they are not so bad! this was a great piece of writing!