Inside A Darkened Room

Quatrains in couplets

A darkened room knows no sorrow
No today and no tomorrow;
A darkened room has no sadness
It has no pain, only madness.

A darkened room has no light
Has no moon or starlight bright;
A darkened room has no shine
Has no lustre, yours or mine.

A darkened room has no good
Has no heartbeat, has no blood;
A darkened room has no breath
Has no life but only death.

A darkened room has no style
Has no simper, has no smile;
A darkened room has no grin
Has no easiness within.

A darkened room has no day
Has no notion, has no say;
A darkened room has no eve
Has no reason to believe.

A darkened room has no PC
It has no he or has no she;
A darkened room has no view
Has no me and has no you.

Reviews

[Lena]

A darkened room so aptly captures the place where many people exist daily. The pain of nonexistence, the lack of dreams and dread of fear is palpable. Overall sadness desperately in need of Hope.
Wow, What a vivid journey.

[Alan S Jeeves]

Hi Lena, hope I didn't scare you with 'Inside a Darkened Room'. Seriously though, thank you so much for you excellent comment it was a delight to receive it.
Kind regards, Alan

[Lisasview]

Oh goodness, did I ever enjoy this.. I am new to posting my words although I have been keeping a secret journal for many years. Since I was 10 tears old and now in my 70's!!!!
I love the true structure of a poem and sonnet and now a quatrain... with absolutely zero education in poetry...I am fascinated by all this... such an adventure..
So ofcourse, I loved yours..I have been getting great help since I recently started posting my work..
Perhaps you might like to read Hand~In ~Hand or Mothers letter... the two I first posted... since that time I have posted several others.. Glad I happened upon your work.. Really so lovely..
Lisa, now in Spain

[Alan S Jeeves]

Hello in Spain Lisa. I am delighted to receive your great comments. Poetry certainly is a fascinating journey and the key to writing it is to feel what you write and write what you feel. Kind regards, Alan

[Lisasview]

Well, dear Alan... yes I totally agree... What I write just flows out of me and onto the page...Hope you have the time to read mine as well...
Lisa, 7am in Spain

[Red Brick Keshner]

All engulfing darkness. Once the eyes grow accustomed to the darkness, not much can transpire should the darkened room be bare. Much to think about here. Thanks for sharing, Alan.

[Alan S Jeeves]

Thanks again for looking in Frederick, a pleasure to share with you.
Kind regards, Alan

[Chris Shaw]

There might not be anything to see in a darkened room, yet a darkened room can certainly play with the emotions and imagination. It only needs a tiny glimmer of light to alter the situation. You took me back to my childhood where a darkened room brought out fear. All the nasties of ghosts and baddies would come out to play. Your stanzas in quatrains are well crafted and I was pleased to stop by and say hello Alan.

Chris

[Alan S Jeeves]

Good morning Chris. Thanks for looking in and commenting on 'Inside a Darkened Room'. I apologise for taking you back all those years to your childhood (I wonder if your cousin Margaret lived in the room). It was wonderful to switch on and receive your words. Kind regards, Alan.
p.s. Very cool picture.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Alan. Pic is of mum and dad on their engagement. Teenagers they were. Laughing about Margaret. She was an irritation, not a nightmare :) No apologies needed. I had a great childhood, I was just scared of the dark. Best wishes to you and have a great day