Bled

We've all felt the desperation/frustration of unrequited love; sometime's we're the ones who create those feelings. This poem intends to emphasize some of those feelings.

Bled

 

it’s what you don’t say, which speaks louder than words

it’s that resounding silence, the darkest of the piano’s chords

 

it’s the way you shrug, you sigh--you become ever so small

it’s the way that you’re there, but truly not there at all

 

forlorn, you are curled in the arms of that old tattered chair

looking somewhere, but nowhere, twisting your unruly hair

 

your shoulders are slumped; your lips forever smile down

you’ve the look of a princess, mourning her lost crown

 

 I’M SORRY hangs by a noose in the stillness of the room

met with no mercy, they face their own ill-fated doom

 

my voice moves the rafters; I implore, PLEASE hear my plea

i pull at my clothes, your clothes--yet you still don’t see

 

a vase crashes, crumples, scatters, before your unflinching eyes

the deepest freeze during winter--this is your unyielding guise

 

a dragon’s fire couldn’t make a drop melt from your heart

you’re but two feet away, yet we’re two worlds’ distance apart

 

for someone who “loves love stories,” as you so eloquently say

it seems that ours is more befitting of your “love to hate” cache

 

perhaps this one time, you shall feel the solitude of an empty bed

and dwell in your twisted joy, knowing that my heart’s been bled

 

i’ve no fervor left to continue for I see my love’s been taken in vain

enjoy the vacant power of your throne; revel in your miserable reign

 

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

Having read this through ,my mind takes off
on a tangent. We can save the world for
a republic such as ours simply by making love
to all the dissidents and when we have them
securely in our power we tighten the screws,
make them feel we may leave. All the dissenters
of the world will be incpacitated and lay down
their arms.
I loved your story, but the poor woebegotten
unrequieted will not have me to beat up on.
Sure you are. You are the top writer--- wish I
could simpathize with the unrequieted, but they
will survive.
---- Eagle Cruagh

[Karl Woof Junior]

im angry at both you and i, you for not sending me read requests and I for not reminding you thats how my friends here get read

this is beautiful i wish i read it earlier

[Areeba]

I’M SORRY hangs by a noose in the stillness of the room

met with no mercy, they face their own ill-fated doom

Love this one specially!!!

[Jack...]

It is sad the situations that some are lured into only to find that the pot of gold is actually jagged rock at the end of the great abyss. very cool poem.

[Lexi I.]

Thanks for the review, Jack!

[Justin Littlefield]

It ails me to know what some people suffer through, especially someone holding on to love and only receiving emptiness. It's no way to go on, we've all been there. Sleepless nights, wondering what the point is. It's hard for some to accept love and in your situation I'd say he didn't deserve you. I can feel your pain because your word choice is powerful and flawless. The rhythm of it really worked and I love the form. You started so dismally but in the end I saw strength. Keep that strength forever and know that you have it. You don't deserve dejection

[Lexi I.]

Thank you for the review. As nice as your words are, I am not necessarily the victim in the poem; rather, I am the person who used to be the one to close up...as sad as it is for me to admit. I wrote the poem from the perspective of others I may have hurt in the past...

[B-poet]

Very deep and reviting. I was very moved and intrigued after reading this gripping piece of poetic literature. Great write. :)

[Lexi I.]

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!

[Levi Levin]

Good job Jane! You used a balanced set of words here. I like it:)

[Lexi I.]

Thanks for reading, Matthew, and for taking the time to drop a compliment!

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

What a very truthful poem you'd written here! Very raw, emotive, haunting, as any poem should be. Great work to capture your inner heart's emotions!!!

[Lexi I.]

Thank you very much for reviewing my poem!

[Ahmad Cox]

Such powerful and gripping words and meaning. I can feel the powerful emotions in every line.

[Lexi I.]

Thanks for reading and reviewing! I appreciate it! :)

[MAC]

this is very Jane like. the format brings out your passion and anger. it is sad to love someone who can not love back the same way...maybe not at all

[Lexi I.]

Thanks for the review! I agree with your comment! It is quite unfortunate to place your love in the wrong place.