Nightmares

Dream

And scream

For mercy of the night

Mares flooding your sight

Try not to sleep too long, love

Come with me, yes come above

Why do you let them take you?

Please, love listen to my coo

The monsters are simply

Nothing but stars

So don’t scream

But dream.

Author's Note

Imagine...

Reviews

[chandlerl]

The flow really does fit well with how you shaped it. I thought it was lovely.
Thank you for sharing. =)

[Tunder]

Very sweet. The shape of this poem is aesthetically alluring! This poem mimics dreams in the fact that it is rather fragmented (in the way that it is a story), but also flows really well (in that sense of language). Brilliant work!

[AleyshaRosa]

Wow, thanks Tunder =]

[Faffy]

Quite simply stunning, fluid and awesome (the adjectives are endless!) i like the certain trance this puts you into when reading it which to me its quite amazing because being able to reach out of the written word and affect that reader physically is simply incredible. as for the idea i love it, i like the dichotomy of your words to the actual topic, you make nightmares seem like any other dream that should be enjoyed in all its complexity, so all in all love it =)

Pen on!

-Roshan

[AleyshaRosa]

Thank you so much, Roshan! I appreciate your amazing review =]

[Caradoc]

I find it interesting that I was just thinking about nightmares and wondering how I could put it to paper. You've gone in a different direction than the one I was contemplating, which I find intriguing. You've got some good word choice and a suitable rhyme scheme. And then there is the way you made the first and last two lines bookends to the entire piece, which was creative. I also like how the text is shaped in such a way as to give the impression of a candle's flame.

I, of course, couldn't help but think a little of "A Nightmare On Elm Street" when reading this.

Well done.

-Caradoc

[AleyshaRosa]

Wow, thanks Caradoc. Much appreciated =]

[Caradoc]

You're very welcome.

[tressa]

i get a very scattered dream-like state when I read this, which i really like. Scattered, yet whole.....

[Neon]

Yeh .. it's cool. I liked the way to working. You've given a shape of a flickering light in the form of words. I loved this artistry. The theme, words, concept, background everything's cool and nicely written. Keep on dear, Aly-Ely

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks, Neon =]

Haha Aly-Ely, love it

[Dayran]

The power of the dream ... and with that the power of possibilities ... some new. There's no reason to simply stay with one horrible fright ... nicely done.

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks much, Dayran