Reflection

Reflection

A Poem by AleyshaRosa

I miss everything

I used to be

I love nothing

When I see

Her eyes burn

Telling me

It’s not my turn

My reflection

Is my

Deflection

Of the truth

 

© 2013 AleyshaRosa


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"My reflection
Is my
Deflection
Of the truth"
Great lines.. Nicely expressed! Short but I like it..



Posted 3 Years Ago


this is simple yet powerful. i fell like this should have been a little long because i truly like it. but the way you wrote it let the readers wanting more . i know i do . very nice work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Its never a good idea to take someone's word for it ... take a second opinion ... and then the test ... to find whose deflection it is. Nice write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


AleyshaRosa

6 Years Ago

Thanks, Dayran =]
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I love this.
It's simplistic, yet deep, feeling like your missing something you once where, maybe a child like innocence you once had before you've learned about things that unhinged the mystery or ruined your trust in people or society as a whole.
Truth seems to do that.
Beautiful poetry.
-Thank you.

Posted 6 Years Ago


AleyshaRosa

6 Years Ago

No, Chandlerl, thank you for the inspiring review =]
chandlerl

6 Years Ago

No problem. =)
i like the transitions, how they drop off....i like the simplicity. simple truth or deflection

Posted 6 Years Ago


AleyshaRosa

6 Years Ago

Absolutely
Wonderful poem! I have only one thing to point out;
"My reflection
Is my
Deflection
Of the truth"
These lines throw the rhythm of the rest of the poem. Changing it to
"My reflection
Is my deflection
Of the truth"
would definitely improve this hindrance. xox

Posted 6 Years Ago


AleyshaRosa

6 Years Ago

Thanks for the feedback,
And now that you point it out, I agree it's a little choppy, although.. read more

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Last Updated on November 25, 2013
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AleyshaRosa
AleyshaRosa

Abbotsford, BC, Canada



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Canadian, eh? I've been writing since I was 13 (I'm now 18) and have recently started back up on writing a novel that I'm now half through. I mostly write prose poems and short stories with a tonne .. more..

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