You are my.

 

You are my strength,

But also my weakness.

You are my light,

But also my shade.

You are my friend,

But also my foe.

You are my angel,

But also my devil.

You are my everything,

But also my nothing.

 

Author's Note

Critique?

Reviews

[lauren emily]

I agree with tomboy. I really liked the simplicity of this and how in just a few words you managed to capture the essence of almost every relationship.
For 11, you've definitely got talent. Keep up the good work, you'll go far! :)

~Lauren

[tomboy]

I like it despite what other people have said. I think that it's simplicity makes it that much better and that it represents the confusion of love very well. It also represents that while love can be wonderful it can also be painful, and someone that you love may make you happy at times but also hurt you at others. I think that it was wonderful, a joy to read. (:

[Bexers]

I would have to disagree.
This should be what most people are to other people. The trick is to learn to live with them as an everything and a nothing, to not get too attached. Once you get attached, you only set yourself up for disappointment. (Could just be my current mentality state, but alas)
I thought it was a fairly good poem.

It may be vague, yes but I think there is an underlying concept and they have potential.
Keep it up!!

[a]

Sadly, from my point of view, this hardly a poem, hardly reviewable and cannot be an inspiration to anyone. Poetry isn't about word-for-word expressions of thoughts, it isn't supposed to be this way - like you're telling what's the current time or is it raining outside. It must be special, emotional - it's duty is to project the inner environment and mentality of the author.