Half a poem for my mother

The smell of beer breath
And cigarette
burns
The fear of knowing it's my turn
To wake her up
Should be enough
To stop
Loving
But
Wasn't..

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

whoa! that's something very unique... i can feel the emotion behind this write....it said more than a full poetry could...clappings!!!

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you, thank you! I'm glad to hear the emotion shows through.

[Mary Helda]

heartfelt write..you should find it in your heart to forgive..

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you for reading and feeling my piece. I will always forgive.. it's the forgetting I have trouble with. But it made me who I am today and for that alone I am grateful

[Mary Helda]

it is ard to forget...i know from experience..you just have to live with it somehow

[Jimmy Yetts]

No, rarely is.
Maybe, this is more a full poem for half-a-mom.
I had one, too.
Hard-hitting piece!

[A.marie.speaks]

Brilliant, "full poem for half a mom". You hit it spot on!

[wordman]

i wonder what heart aches she bears,and i hope you can forgive her shortfalls
maybe one day she will feel life again.. great write!

[A.marie.speaks]

Forgive but never forget. She taught me all the ways to fail as a mother and so, at least, I know what not to do! Thank you for your kind comments.

[wordman]

so you got something from it ! and i know it hurts you the most.you`re welcome

[Sami Khalil]

It is hard to do in the turmoil and ups and downs of things. I hope you find the other half of the coin. Excellent...:)............

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ....:)......

[Clara]

This is a brilliant write, brief but it says everything you need to know.

I think it is an innate compulsion to love our mothers, no matter who they are and how much they've hurt us. Love to you for sharing something so close to your heart.

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you! It is, like most writing, baring a piece of your soul but it is also a real piece of my personal history in broad daylight for all to see and judge. It is a freeing, remarkable feeling to even just post it here. Thank you again for your kind words of support.

[Clara]

You're very welcome!

[viola]

It's short, but says so much. I'm sorry.

You could make it even shorter and have the last line simply be "But wasn't." We know you are referring to the events set forth in the poem.

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you, and I think you're right, it does keep in line with he right sound to say but wasn't instead of but it wasnt.. thank you for that insight!

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and powerful words. You wrote a complete story in so few words. I did like the honest ending. Love for dear mother cannot be killed. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you. The love has definitely, finally faded to a tiny sliver.. but it took so much to crush it. Love for a parent is strange like that

[Coyote Poetry]

It is. My mother and father were smokers and drinkers. They did their best and you are welcome.

[alifeacoustic]

Wonderful, powerful, potent write. Says so much in so few words. How love is never just a switch we can turn on and off, no matter what people put us through. Somehow, we find the strength from within to rise above where we are and see what we will be.
Beautifully written.

[A.marie.speaks]

Love is so difficult and misguided at times. I struggled with this one.. I wanted to write more but then I felt it was best left hanging.. symbolically like i was left hanging by her.