Waking Up and Reaching Out

The world
Is full of pain
And I am
Disgusted
I have mustered
Enough contempt
To darken even the lightest of hearts
And I have only started
To scratch the surface
Of this
Grotesque
Scab
Covering humanity
How could we
be blind
To this cancerous lump
Malignant and festering
Infecting every cell
Mutating our souls
Controlling our minds
Choking out the only home
We will ever know..
Until every seed that grows
Sprouts toxic leaves
And distorted petals
Only then
Will we try to pretend
We never knew it would end
Like this..

Reviews

[alifeacoustic]

This is brilliant and intense. This works equally well as a warning and as an observation of our own demise.
I love the intensity of the words, which I know I have already mentioned, but it was so well done I thought I would mention it again :)
Superb.

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you! I truly appreciate your comment.I have been questioning why we as a country and as a people can encourage such atrocities, look by and ignore inhumane acts/practices just because it works in our financial favors. It's a dark tunnel I'm staring into..and it is ominous and terrifying. I feel like Mel Gibson in conspiracy theory sometimes! But it produces a wild fire of creative poetry in my mind.

[alifeacoustic]

Its sad but true that the greed and intimidation of those in power, has trickled so far down the chain that we are suspicious of everyone. As you mentioned, tomorrows enemies might as well be chosen by a pin in a map, it wouldnt be any worse than whatever system they use now.

[A.marie.speaks]

So true. Hoping for an end seems nieve.. but what the hell, I'm still hoping a tiny bit.

[alifeacoustic]

We can but hope :)

[.]

A cry of disgust at our wanton lust to inflict punishment on our Mother Earth.

This is a very strongly worded and opinionated poem. The abject disgust of the writer seems to spit itself on to the page, controlled yet angered beyond her normal boundaries.
There have been many poems written on this theme, yet this poem manages to transcend the pile by being extremely forthright and venomous in its description and emotion.
A very strong, well written poem. A poem demanding to be read and heard. Nice work.

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you very much for your wonderful review!

[Nisreen]

i feel your emotions here speaking of the darkness that exists in our world
sometimes coming close to any darkness we feel this world must all be this way

hopefully there is enough light to kill all darkness

[A.marie.speaks]

Here's to hope! :) ✌ thank you for your comments love

[Nigel Newman]

Wow! Beautifully written but so dark, sad, and angry. And nobody can really disagree - that's the scary part. In some way every single one of us is being hypocritical. I enjoy drinks from plastic bottles; I expect a new car and new computer every few years, I buy cheap milk from the supermarket, I get my Americano from East European workers paid a pittance by a multinational coffee chain but I don't like too much new housing or immigration, I want cheap food from overseas but I don't want the farmers to clear the forests to grow it. Our antibiotics don't work any longer and yet more extreme substances will be tested and launched upon our primitive bodies that haven't evolved at anything like the pace of medicine, etc, etc. And seemingly every country on the planet is becoming internally more extreme and polarised.

In some ways, though North Korea scares the **** out of me that they might actually push the button, I have hopes that in times of extreme 'military political' crisis someone at the last moment will blink and see sense - that's happened before, e.g. Cuba Missile crisis in the 60s. The greater worry for me is the exhaustion of the planet's resources combined with overpopulation because there's no since point to 'attack', and we can all say 'well I'd do X and already do Y and Z, but it's everyone else ....'

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you for reading and for your comment. I do agree with what you're saying. We've only scraped the tip if the iceberg, I think

[Inject Positivity]

very thought provoking... very powerful use of words as it makes the reader feel moved....amazingly placed words... well thought and expressed as i was deeply in thinking about the concept and message behind the poem... absolutely brilliant presentation.... 100 ratings....

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you, I've worried this one is too broad and heavy.. I was thinking of rewriting or breaking it up somehow but I do love this version, so I'm very glad to hear you liked it and it inspired some thoughts ! Thank you for you comment

[Inject Positivity]

well it was indeed inspiring and thought provoking... you are welcome sweet frnd...

[Akki]

This is awesome poem... I really like it.... well done! ...keep it up!....keep write...
: )

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you so much! :)

[Akki]

Welcome : )

[Mary Helda]

your poem got me really angry..it made me think about how much evil,greed,wasted power,injustice,etc is in this world...it was well written..great job

[A.marie.speaks]

I'm so glad to hear this poem moved you in such ways. I really wanted all those feelings to be contagious, unyielding in this one.

[Mary Helda]

well sweetie..you did achieve your goal..effortlessly:-)

[A hare off]

Extremely powerful and hard hitting is this poem. You have spoken your thoughts loud and clearly and all that I see makes perfect sense. How can we just walk by and watch someone bleed, turn our head when someone cries out for help. We are called human, but are we? I liked this alot and I hope that it echoes towards everyone's ears in a resounding chant to set this world on the right track to saving itself. Really good poem.

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you so much! I am hoping for the same! We have become strange creatures, humans. Never has there been such a perfectly hypocritical species. But here's to change and to waking up and reaching out.

[Adam Adams]

Ah... i must say, u got a way to portray things of heart in poetry. Nice shot. Well, it's true, we all lost humanity & living behind d veil of love but what keeps us all so living undisguised is the realism of world that has its own vibes to confronting pain, presumably. Kinda deep & very artistic work!

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you! And I think you've got a good point, the world does have its own vibes and ways for confronting pain.

[David Scott]

Thankfully contempt and disgust are not emotions I have experienced often. I can see the usefulness of a righteous condemnation, but I have never felt entitled to wield such a weapon.
Yet evil is real. Even magnets repulse one another when approached "backwards".
The write was provocative and got me thinking. Honestly I don't know what to "feel" here other than a sense of something being way out of place and unnecessary. Me thinks I might be too soft hearted. Ha.
The poetry however is excellently presented.

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you for reading. You are truely a lucky person to be so soft hearted. Treasure that! I have more of a morbid, slightly pessimistic view point but I do see hope once in a while!

[David Scott]

Yin/Yang of life. There is pain both ways and there at blessing gifted both ways. Neither is wrong or right veiw. You observe and see what you see, feel what you feel, speak with the voice you are given. The wise listen to all songs but follow the one's they learn to understand.
Keep true to your song and the discord will resolve when paired notes support the bravery of your sharing. (I probably need more sleep) ha.

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you. I think you're right and make perfect sense. However I may need more sleep too! Hah

[DirectTangent]

There is great heat and rawness and immediacy of emotion in this piece - something akin to a resting geyser suddenly erupting.

Your word choice lends to this, and in your writing there is undeniable intensity. I suggest combing out a couple of tangles to smooth some of the flow but, should you choose to do so, proceed carefully so as not to lose any of the sheen that you've created.

Very nicely done. Thank you for it.

[A.marie.speaks]

Thank you for reading and your comments. I am going to attempt to clean this one up a bit but it will be a challenge, like you said, not to lose any of its sheen.