as if

as if the world runs by you

with your virtues at tide...

what awaits you on summer nights?

while I wait in the wake,

in the pouring rain

for an answer unmistaken

it wont come

itll drift on this tide

that ebbs and paints you like a figure

itll drift on and on

and i wont be fast

cause its all yellow and then its not

"it doesnt matter"

and then it does

 

yesterday i felt you in my hair

i see you staring

when and when and only when

the waiting of you

the beauty-the expanse of time

but then its not here

the world doesn't stop

our coexisting worlds don't jive

like the sun and I

your the light

and then the mist delivers

and im in the rain again

 

as if it existed

a world of happiness

where beauty was there

in the endless night

hopeless and taunting

now here i am again 

in a field, a maze

blinded by the thought 

of you in khakis

whats wrong with my world?

what exactly... keeps me in the darkness?

its all a game 

its all yellow and then its not

cause there are no rules

in this beauty-this expanse of time

keeping me waiting

on the tide

that ebbs and paints you like a figure

your here and soon, you wont

you'll forget

as if there was anything to forget

the girl who meant nothing

she was a world apart

on a tide

that was never fast enough

to catch hold of you

but your the sun

and will never be touched

 

 

Reviews

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

This beautiful poem reads as if it were waves lapping the rocks of the shore. Your work is stunning.

[Amen_Poppies]

thank you so much! that really means a lot to me. thats actually part of what i was going for. thanks for your input!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

You did it well. I love that tidal song.

[Admiral Kirk]

This is a wonderful and powerful poem. It's very emotional and only a tiny bit confusing. The flow was broken a bit in a few places where it should have said you're instead of your, but overall this was a great poem. Good job!

[Amen_Poppies]

thanks for the review. sometimes when i get caught in a train of thought it can get a bit messy. i appreciate you taking the time to review it:)

[Admiral Kirk]

Yeah, I know what you mean. My computer underlines all my spelling mistakes, and sometimes after typing in a poem I look up and see all these red lines everywhere... It was a pleasure to read and review this.

[Ed Hart]

this is exceptional...your sense of word and line is finely tuned

[Amen_Poppies]

thank you so much. it means a lot to me