Love and War

Love and War

A Poem by Mina

An eye opened,

With smoke of unleashed regret,

In the land where they were asked to walk not to run,

A patriotic tear cried,

And the barriers of emotions got heavier,

A distance so far,

A land so dead,

Had no place for the heart that lived,

© 2013 Mina


Author's Note

Mina
This poem is very close to my heart.It captures a story of soldier who is living his last moments and thinks about his loved ones.
At that instant moment his heart lives in a place where the only thing you can see are corpse.
basically his soul stays for eternal youth.

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very imaginative and well written poem, I loved it :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mina

10 Years Ago

Thank yu
Your review means a lot:)
annabellee

10 Years Ago

you're most welcome :)
very sad but well penned Mina..o)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mina

10 Years Ago

Thank you
Glad you reviewed it :)
Wow,
thats a reallly sad writting
but very nicely done

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mina

10 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Im glad you enjoyed itt
ayosonolowo

10 Years Ago

You're welcome
I had the task with a few Soldiers to wrap the dead and freeze them after Death Valley in the first Iraq war. We felt a deep sadness. These were just men forced to fight. We knew their families were waiting for them and the families knew nothing. Soldiers are glad when there are no wars. Seeing death leave scars upon the mind forever. Last line in fact.
"Had no place for the heart that lived,"
Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mina

10 Years Ago

Oh im soo happy you liked itt :) are yu a soldier?
Thank yu for the reviews :)
Solidie.. read more
This is wonderful :))
but so sad.

A distance so far
A land so dead :((

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mina

10 Years Ago

Thank you x
Glad yu reviewd itt
:)
Its a bit sad x
I mean a lot :(
FelicityAllona

10 Years Ago

Yeah. . .it is sad.
A little gem Mina a sad little gem. N

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mina

10 Years Ago

:)
I'll try to write something happy for you .
Neville

10 Years Ago

That would be good. AGTs N
Wow. What a beautiful and sad write Mina. Thank you for sharing...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Mina

10 Years Ago

Thank You ... Glad you liked it.
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

I did. You are welcome...:)

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Gravesend, kent, United Kingdom



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