Devil in a blue dress

Devil in a blue dress

A Poem by The Flawed

 

Met a demon in a pale blue dress,
Saw the devil with an angels face,
She had the greenest of the evil eyes,
Just one look, and I was hypnotized.
She stole my soul as she told me lies,
She called it love, yes she called it love.
 
She said she’d be the best friend, that I ever had,
She’s not all good, cause she’s really bad,
She’d stick with me through thick and thin,
So, let us let the game begin,
The game of love, yes the game of love.
 
 
In a winter’s day she said she’s gone,
She’s got a life to live she can’t hang around.
I said “what about love?”
She said “what about, love?”
 
I said, “Love is rare, rare is gold, gold is greed,
Greed is cold, cold am I as you walk out the door”?
“Love is pain, pain is real, real is lust, lust is sin,
Sin is pleasure; pleasure’s true, true is the love that I have for you”.
 
She laughed and said, “There is no love”

© 2010 The Flawed


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To be cast aside like a used tissue
is hurtful to your manly pride
You fooled yourself her love was true
a lasting love which would abide.
Par for the course I am afraid
The honey trap we fall into.
Infatuated by some maid who
then decides we will not do.
She's had her fun its time to leave
Which she can do without regret.
and we are left alone to grieve.
A lesson which we wont forget.
although in time we'll try again
when passing time deadens the pain



Posted 15 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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This is incredible! Everything about it is just, so wonderful! wow!!

The closing was genius, I love the analogy, the subtle rhyme. This was realllllly well done.



Posted 13 Years Ago


"Love is pain, pain is real, real is lust, lust is sin,
Sin is pleasure; pleasure’s true, true is the love that I have for you"
That part is amazing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The ending is what makes this poem so powerful. The last stanza and sentence are so profound and makes the start pale in comparison. The perfect ending. Cold and restless.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love how this builds, the rhyme and flow of the piece seem to have you reading faster and faster until that last line... ouch. This piece has to be read aloud!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was nice..I mean, this was really really very nice!
The metaphor and the inner symbolism behind this piece is simply outstanding!
Great job

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Congrats on your great winning poem. Well Done!

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Reads like an old rock song to me.
We do have to beware of these sexual attackers, who seduce us and throw us away when they're done exploiting us for whatever reason they had in mind.
Nice form, though I'm not sure I've got the beat 100% right, but there definitely is one.
Keep it up.


Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

i really like this one lots of good imagery in this and the ending ties it up well...

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I hate to correct errors, but the spelling should be "angels"....................other than that it's fabulous, and was a fun read! Well done.

Posted 15 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

YAY!!! F*****g Awesome!!! Fantastic voice, superb rythm, masterful word play. I really loved this. It was like sitting in a smoky bar sipping something that could burn a hole through the floor and listening to a 120 year old blues singer belting out the best rendition of One Bourbon, One Scotch, One Beer anyone has ever heard. Thank you. This is ridiculously awesome. My only criticism is I wish I had written it.

Posted 15 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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