A Poem by Amit Parmessur

short and simple...


The briny horizon seems very complacent,

And the boy muses, with pristine glee,

On the wooden bench with love signs,

Though much is awaiting him; yeah, carefree

he sits on, musical and dreamy.


Then the love signs strike him so sharply,

And his rusty heart springs up

To look for her again, outside his palm.

He should’ve made her his long ago even if

It would have lasted one minute.

© 2012 Amit Parmessur

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The starting represents the perfection of the scene around the love-struck boy. He describes it as 'very complacent' one to induce him to 'pristine glee' while he contemplates of the marvels to come. none of that can be denied. then, the second stanza is boldly striking with the symbolical presence of the missing woman he loves. as the lover sits 'on the wooden bench with love signs', i can sense that there is deep nostalgia being felt by him. Now, i am guessing that she may be in his palm because there is a photo of her that he has been holding on to. Or, perhaps, another material which reminds him of her. A wedding ring or locket belonging to her. I'm interested to know what u've had in mind.
Your explanations are surreal. I really admire how the yearning of a man has been expressed succinctly with varied emotions (relief, appreciation, regret, loneliness etc.) to it.

Posted 7 Years Ago

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nice one :)

Posted 6 Years Ago

thank you!

Posted 7 Years Ago

this was uch a beautiful painted scene before my eys beautiful poem amit !:)

Posted 7 Years Ago

thank you...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Posted 7 Years Ago

aawww thats really dek=lightful

Posted 7 Years Ago


Posted 7 Years Ago

Then the love signs strike him so sharply,

And his rusty heart springs up

................great.....I like your wordings which are telling the real picture of the poet's view. best wishes.

Posted 7 Years Ago

So beautifully written!

Posted 7 Years Ago

thank you.

Posted 7 Years Ago

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Added on February 11, 2012
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Amit Parmessur
Amit Parmessur

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Born in 1983 Amit Parmessur is one of the editors of The Rainbow Rose. His poems have appeared in several literary magazines such as: Ann Arbor Review, Calliope Nerve, Damazine, Zouch Magazine and man.. more..

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