The enclosed box of life

The enclosed box of life

A Poem by Shwetz
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A major part of your life is work

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In the enclosed box of people, table and computers
Cabins, washrooms and kitchens
Whispers, talks and business
Lies something, something subtle
Disciplined Doors; physical and intangible
Life making the inhabitants
Some wary, some challenging
Some growing, some stagnant
The beeps reminding of the
ticking life gone either
Useful or mundane into nothingness
The disciplined doors teaching you
what to take and what to keep
and what to give away
It's subtle, the difference between
The learning and the one stagnant

© 2018 Shwetz


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thought-provoking write. intricate wording and images. really made me stop and think ... :)

"Do not hire a man who does your work for money, but him who does it for love of it." - Thoreau

Posted 8 Months Ago


Shwetz

8 Months Ago

Thank you Pete :)
I'm naive,the disciplined doors could they be what your mind let's in and what it keeps out?liked this write

Posted 8 Months Ago


The box of life holds so much for us all. You did a great job!

Posted 8 Months Ago


I guess one can choose to be a simple worker, a 'jobs worth' or learn and progress and make something of your career?

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shwetz

8 Months Ago

Completely agree with you John... Thanks for stopping by!
I loved the idea behind your poem... Life's events and chores are found in this beautiful little poem by you.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Shwetz

8 Months Ago

Just a random scribble of mine... Yet happy to know what you think. Thank you
yeah! it's true it's subtle... the disciplined doors (workplace) teach you what to keep and what to give away. well, it is beautifully expressed poem and the conclusion was like parle g biscuit sprinkled with some rum. but this is not life although you can say that it's a part of it. But it is what we see every day. same people, same office but different challenges... :) Have a nic day

Posted 11 Months Ago


Shwetz

11 Months Ago

Oh What a combination! Parle G with Rum... Lol. Thank you for your generous words and review..!!
sh va

11 Months Ago

i think you should try it. but make sure you have to sprinkle few drop of it otherwise it will turn .. read more
See now I think "a major part of your work is life"...or should be anyway..Stone the computers..water the fish and by all means set the clock properly lest you find yourself on time. This is truly inspiring .Shweta and just when I thought no one was out there turning their riddles into snowmen for fear of the coming melt, well here I find you with your ice cone and inspiration keeping it going! Wonderful!!
You've reached into a decisive pocket here , I see in this poem what I use to watch daily, looking to go mad and I remember asking myself "When precisely did the world go mad?" It was not on my watch...no surely IT DID NOT happen on my watch?
Well, turns out every generation employs a host of great metaphors in their life to tell themselves exactly what they wish to hear though their souls are rotting. We have done no less then to appease Moloch and in this, all our pondering are being attacked on the sass of a wonderful, wonderful abstract. You've taken your tangibles over and shined their silver with oil and care into the land of intangibles here, A land where all the best ones are quite mad Alice...Simply put.."Well done!"


Posted 11 Months Ago


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Shwetz

11 Months Ago

Perdition, friend! good to know you view on this. You could never be a part if this monotonous, rout.. read more
Perdition

11 Months Ago

The fact that you saw it alone is wonderful enough as it cannot be said enough of how mad we live o.. read more

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Added on December 10, 2018
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