pack it in, sick and thin

pack it in, sick and thin

A Chapter by Ana Papaya
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Just words

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i hear the weather's nicer out east
the sun can't wait to shine
and i hear you left on a dime
packed it in
sick and thin
wanting your end

i'll come on down
if the price is right
trade in my life
watch the sun set on an old friend
i'll do that, i can
wrap a bandage round my heart
to keep the love in

but i'll never live again
love will be my end
i hear the weather's nicer out east
the sun can't wait to shine
but the death of your heart
will be the end of mine

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© 2020 Ana Papaya


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Holy kwap! It's said that a poet gets better with every poem they write.....I can very well attest to that on a personal level....but can also attest to it on an objective level. This is amazing! The imagery, the musicality, right down to the progression of the narrative. I'm debating on whether the "I'll do that" is even necessary in the second stanza....whether it would be more powerful to simply go right into "I can wrap a bandage....." but overall, this is absolutely wow!! Well done!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

3 Years Ago

Thank you emi, I am thrilled by your reaction to this. :)
emipoemi

3 Years Ago

my pleasure.



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I picked this out of the blue and I feel fortunate
I am not into the writing or reading of the romance thing but you have done an easy to read very impressively done piece here, with such a common thing, the weather, repeating a relatable reference that helps keep things all effectively together
There are a number of very good poets on this site (and elsewhere) and work like this puts you up with the best
Very very nicely done A Papaya

Posted 10 Months Ago


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Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Thank you for reaching in to find this poem and for the really nice comment. :)
I love this Ana... everything about it and the sincerity of the lines bleeds thru and oh how consonant that feeling is... I feel if i ever really allow myself to truly love again it might kill me too:) but to love is to live anything less is just biding time

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

yes, what you say is all so true :)
thanks very much for your comment!!!
I'm feeling like this is about dealing with death of someone, or the soon to be death of someone and an internal struggle of emotions. I may be way off on this, but death is on my mind today, so it may have just took over for me. Anyway, you know I love your writes and this one lived up to the papaya hype. Lyrical, and flowing with just enough bounce and packed with emotion.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

3 Years Ago

James, thank you so much. I always appreciate your great comments!
You certainly packed a lot into this write Papaya, my word you surely did.... your references to the weather out east made me shiver and the sick and thin touch was so subliminally heroin chique.... thoroughly enjoyed, ta so very much..... Neville

Posted 3 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

3 Years Ago

Neville, thank you very much.
Neville

3 Years Ago

pleasure......
This is beautifully written & singing with originality. I love the melancholy tones of seeming surrender. Sometimes it might not be the choice we dream of, but it it's the logical one we must make. One thing I love most in good writing is contrast & here you really deliver on the unavoidable contrasts of life (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

3 Years Ago

Margie, thank you so much for the kind comment on this one :)
I enjoyed the story in the poem. The poem told a true story. We can escape location but we cannot escape our memories. Thank you Ana for sharing the amzing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

3 Years Ago

so true, we can escape the location.. i like that.
thank you so very much!
Coyote Poetry

3 Years Ago

I enjoyed your work today and you are welcome Ana.
Years pass ...but the thoughts still float behind the eyes...

Posted 3 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

3 Years Ago

so true that is... thank you Chris :)
Chris

3 Years Ago

Anytime...
oh wow, the personification of heart...the death of one kills another.
if we stop feeling, we stop living...
as that song says "you bleed just to know you're alive"

i think the weather is never nicer out east...but then i am from there...and will take the weather in the midwest over the other...
but sometimes i have that notion that i left my heart in the Bronx. or wish i did.
j.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

3 Years Ago

I love that song, thank you Jacob.
At the time I wrote this the east was having nicer weather.. read more
This is quite haunting and I hear it as a promise rather than a plea. The last verse is soooo, I don't know, but I love it. Love will be the end resonates, like I just heard something everyone else knew, but its taken me this long to hear it. I'm thinking that verse would make an awesome tattoo. :)


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

3 Years Ago

Thank you Lorry for the great comment. Please do feel free to have it tattooed. :) Ouch.
so expressive and poignant the hurt is clearly expressed here

Posted 3 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

3 Years Ago

sette, thank you so much for stopping in to read and leave a nice comment for me. Very much appreci.. read more
sette

3 Years Ago

you are most welcome

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