Dust in Winter

Dust in Winter

A Chapter by Ana Papaya
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No one should die in winter  
The ground is too hard  
The trees too bare 
The flowers all sleeping  

I keep you on a shelf 
Always waiting for a summer that never arrives 
A child of winter you shall forever be 
Until I sprinkle your dust into the breeze 
And watch as you fly away from me


© 2020 Ana Papaya


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That last line. 'way' or 'away'... did you do that on purpose?

Anyway, you're right... no one should die alone. Ever. It's a kind of tragedy that sticks and you can never take back. No one should ever have to die alone. That's kinda what civilization is for, to live and die amongst friends. (this was a terrible fart joke)

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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

That was a typo. Thanks for catching that!



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even as I read these fine words on this sunny summer day, I feel a chill breeze blowing across my back and shoulders.. not sure whether it is calling or pushing me away.. what ever the case might be.. these words are not likely to be forgot....

Neville

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

12 Months Ago

thanks so much, Neville :)
appreciated
January is a wicked month, cruel in its coldness. Well at least in my eyes it is. Lost my Dad and my beloved maternal Nan in January., so your lines resonate with me. At least in spring and summer you have flowers to soften the bare ground. Ashes to the wind, yes I can understand waiting for a warmer day. Lovely work with great depth of feeling.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your comment Chris. So appreciated.
Chris

1 Year Ago

If you are mourning Ana, take care of yourself.
This is actually good. Far too good for this site. i'd recommend keeping good work off of here...

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thanks for that. :)
yes, winter is so harsh, like death it is cold and unforgiving...
i love this piece....
"the trees too bare" they can't even rustle in mourning...
just wow, to this...
and there is even warmth in death in the end...as the ashes are sprinkled into a summer breeze.
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thanks so much Jacob! Really appreciate your comment on this one!
WOW! WOW! And WOW! This shows me how much I've missed seeing you here! I am delighted to see you back. This poem is so thought-provoking becuz the layers of symbols are so complex. One minute I'm thinking "die" as in "stop breathing" . . . the next minute I'm thinking of it as the end of a relationship . . . or the way someone lives on in our minds even tho we wish death of that haunting would come. My thoughts go on & on . . . the sign of an excellent poem! Very powerful writing! Here's hoping you will be able to stick around & delight us more in 2020! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Margie, thanks for being so sweet to me always.
:) I appreciate the kind words here!
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Gee
I read Dave's comment saying that nobody should die alone. My step dad did, he was a nasty, vindictive, bullying b*****d who met his maker alone and I'm so, so glad.
Anyways, another beautifully penned piece which has a very sad but calm feel to it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

there are exceptions for sure, gee. he sounds like an a*s so i can't feel badly for him either. th.. read more
Gee

1 Year Ago

Always a pleasure.
Have a happy New year :)
That last line. 'way' or 'away'... did you do that on purpose?

Anyway, you're right... no one should die alone. Ever. It's a kind of tragedy that sticks and you can never take back. No one should ever have to die alone. That's kinda what civilization is for, to live and die amongst friends. (this was a terrible fart joke)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

That was a typo. Thanks for catching that!

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