I'm about as tall as the shadow that follows me

I'm about as tall as the shadow that follows me

A Chapter by Ana Papaya
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I'm about as tall as the shadow that follows me
everything depends on the sun
sometimes I fall behind
other days I'm out in front

performing my latest tracks
for an audience of fish in a sea
drowning in the beats
feeling hot
slick with heat

groove is skin deep
pounding on the door of poverty

rich people don't dance
like they got nothing else to set them free
they've forgotten what it means

but i'm sure that's a myth
I've forgotten what it means

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© 2020 Ana Papaya


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I love the title of this one! It sounds absurd but its so infinitely true! Your line about the rich people not dancing is wonderfully accurate; wealth just seems to blinker people from the real joys of life, sometimes one has to experience real poverty to be able to embrace all the joys that life has to offer. It hardens the soul with toughness and lets the eyes see everything with greater clarity. It's a very interesting write, dear Ana. Much to ponder here and much enjoyed!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

hi Jamila, thanks a bunch for popping in to read and comment on this one! Great comment, really app.. read more



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Even tho I can relate to the part of your message about rich people vs poor people in a literal sense, even more, I love the second-to-last line which suggests that we humans are bad about putting people in groups & claiming the group has certain attribute(s) as if groups are homogeneous. It's always a myth whenever people are put into groups & labelled as being a certain way. This loops me back to your first lines, which suggest that everything shadows differently depending on perspective. Nicely thought-provoking writing! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

Hey Margie, thanks for finding this one. :)
I liked your poem a lot, but I can't criticize it, since I know little to nothing about poetry (even though I try to write poems myself).

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thank you Esteban, I appreciate you popping in to read and I'm glad you it.
An interesting work here. The first two verses are a comment on the speaker's life. Basically, it seems to say, sometimes you win, sometimes you lose. The shadow may be a reference to some mood disorder which makes some days better than others. The next two verses may be a comment on society, or they could refer to the speaker's inner state, which is often quite near depression. The last verse is curious, seeming to be a bit of self mockery, but I'm not sure. All in all, a well done self portrait.

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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thank you JtB, for a very thoughtful comment.
A very engaging offering
Lots of thoughts in your poem Ana Papaya
I like the thought of singing to the fish, usually we just eat the poor things!
The rich people dancing thingy, I'm wondering if that lack of inclination refers as much to age as it does to wealth!
Statistics show that wealth (on average-certainly there are exceptions) is eventually accumulated during a persons later years and quite often it is sore bones, failing knee joints, health problems, family matters and or other health related issues that are as much as not, responsible for the lack of dancing by older people in general, which would also affect not just the rich but also the (older) poor.
Of course there are always questions and nothing is for certain, but I would be more than willing to volunteer becoming filthy rich in an effort to answer this particular issue.
Hoping then to be lavished with endless wealth, in a helpful effort to assist.
He said


Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thanks Dave. :)
I appreciate your thoughts on aging and the declining mobility, probably tru.. read more
I'm so glad i'm not the only one that sings for the fish... yes they are indifferent but at least your not surprised by the response:/ as long as, of course... one of them doesn't jump out of the aquarium in a desperate attempt to confound the crooning:) I have seen your shadow it is a vast and marvelous shade and you will always know how to dance Papaya

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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

:) Thanks a whole bunch Mr. Bunny!
Loved just loved this poem Ms. Ana. Its very relevant in today's times when the beauty of the sea or the sun goes unseen while one worries about the next fancy item of purchase or a ticket to a fancy vacation. I myself am quite guilty of it. Personally, I feel anyone could dance with that pure abandon I feel in your words. The joy has to come from within regardless of the cash jingling in our pockets. Its possible if we dont let money spoil it for us.

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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

I'd be lying if I said I wasn't guilty of it too at times. Although any vacations are on hold for n.. read more
AJNJ

1 Year Ago

I’m sure things will improve soon :)
Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Let's hope! :)
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As all before have said the rich people lines are ones to be envied :))
We should cherish every day but too often get wrapped up in life's mundane shite and our own " me and mine" bubble.
We should think more of those those that are denied a shadow, the homeless, starving, persecuted.
Good morning


Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Good morning, Gee :) very much appreciate the kind and thoughtful comment. I agree with what you.. read more
I agree dear Ana.
"rich people don't dance
like they got nothing else to set them free
they've forgotten what it means"
I liked the complete poem and the above lines are true. When we own too much, we forget the simple things. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thank you for appreciating my poem, Coyote
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I liked this poem and you are welcome dear Ana.
You have the coolest way of expressing your thoughts. We'e up and down, up and down. I feel like most of my life is an act.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

yes, i do know what you mean but maybe that's how we adapt to change, but going with the flow and ac.. read more

decidedly true my fine literary friend and in more ways than one … in fact, I am quite sure even many of those less privileged are far better off than those who are significantly under privileged and stricken with poverty .. I bet you felt a lot better when you spat this out... bravo :)

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Neville

1 Year Ago


where have you been for such a long time?
Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

i've been 'around' :)
just taking a break as i do from time to time
Neville

1 Year Ago


okay, thanks :)

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