undressing beauty

undressing beauty

A Chapter by Ana Papaya
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the chambers of my heart
    fill with beautiful poetry 

everything i write 
it is meaningless to me

where are the colours 
                  that crafted my art      

i'm left with film noir 
       in place of avant-garde

everything is black and grey
  static won't go away 

not a trace of colour 
            not even a stain

           to remember you by

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© 2020 Ana Papaya


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You nailed this Ana. Although I do like the film noir, black and white, It does lend itself to rain and sad sax music.
Writing of love and the heart is not the same as experiencing and feeling it colour our world, but even with the unspoken sigh at the end, a hope is present that this is not the end of hope, of feeling.
Personally, you're words are always filled with colour, sometimes even resembling an explosion in a skittles factory.
(this will make sense maybe if you get skittles candy there) 😀

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

yes, of course we have skittles here!
my kids love them, so do i but i am trying to manage my.. read more
Lorry

1 Year Ago

Me too, but skittles are so bright and shiny that they must count towards your 5 a day. Okay, they'r.. read more



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having whittled it down to the basics.. you left a whole lot of beauty behind ... quite beautiful by design.... :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


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Ana Papaya

9 Months Ago

Thank you kindly Mr. N. :)
Neville

9 Months Ago


... always a pleasure.. and always mine ...
For years, this is how I've felt at the prospect of writing love poems or other romantic writing. It just felt black-and-white, like I was faking it. I've had colorful experiences around love, but my lifetime of tough endings has turned everything to b&w! Love the way your poem just states observations without expounding on how good or bad it feels . . . your word images show that part (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Hi Margie, thanks for popping in to read this one and sharing your thoughts.
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Lox
"i'm left with film noir
in place of avant-garde"

Are my favorite lines. So beautifully placed and etched throughout the entirety of your piece. Hoping for more!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

good morning, Lox. thanks so much for your comment. :)
This is a tough one, Ana.
we get the beautiful poetry that is in the heart...but somehow it doesn't translate to the paper.
Like trying to make a color movie but it comes out black and white.
I happen to love film noir...and if poetry ends up reflecting that, it is beautiful too.
this is one of my favorite pieces I have read in awhile.
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

very much appreciate your kid comment, thanks for liking it! you made my morning :)
You nailed this Ana. Although I do like the film noir, black and white, It does lend itself to rain and sad sax music.
Writing of love and the heart is not the same as experiencing and feeling it colour our world, but even with the unspoken sigh at the end, a hope is present that this is not the end of hope, of feeling.
Personally, you're words are always filled with colour, sometimes even resembling an explosion in a skittles factory.
(this will make sense maybe if you get skittles candy there) 😀

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

yes, of course we have skittles here!
my kids love them, so do i but i am trying to manage my.. read more
Lorry

1 Year Ago

Me too, but skittles are so bright and shiny that they must count towards your 5 a day. Okay, they'r.. read more
Some people are better left in the past....or in poetry. Why remember the ones who hurt you? Nicely written, Ana. Lydi*

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Agree! Thanks Lydi!!
Possibly it is better this way
lots of other colorless old grey-haired farts hopeful and waiting

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Yeah, probably better. :)
Emotional read here, this tugs at the heart, awesome write

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thank you KT!
everything is black and grey
static won't go away
not a trace of colour
not even a stain

LOVE this part, such vivid imagery right here, this is a very well written write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

hi kymberleigh, thanks a bunch!

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