Well, I killed a man

Well, I killed a man

A Chapter by Ana Papaya
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Well, I killed a man
I think it was way back in '89
his life wasn't worth a damn bit dead or alive
but it still had its price and so did mine

now I see him again as a sick man
following me around at night
walking through my dreams
ain't it funny how sleep cuts through time

and yeah, I knew it from the start
all the girls with torn skirts
they stole this man's heart
I saw it from the start
he was a sick man

he was a sick man
how he broke them all apart
like making love was an art
how he broke them all apart

well, his life wasn't worth damn much dead or alive
but it still had a price and so did mine

so I am paying it with time
and he's paying it with life
Yeah, I killed a man
I think it was back in '89

his life wasn't worth damn much dead or alive
but it still had a price and so did mine
ain't it funny how dreams cut through time

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Ana Papaya
just words

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The feel of real life and the feel of a jazz song. I like the realistic feel of the words. I knew men who were haunted by ghost of dead men. Some soldiers who saw the dirtiest parts of war. Fighting them till death. Outstanding poetry shared dear Ana.
Coyote

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Ana Papaya

3 Months Ago

Thanks Coyote. Always appreciate your kind words and thoughts.
Coyote Poetry

2 Months Ago

Hello dear Ana and you are welcome.



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This is so bluesy Ana. I can imagine this being sung by Billie Halliiday, or someone like her. Even Adele would give a good rendition of this. Lines charged with emotion. A song of revenge or maybe justice for wrong doing.

Chris

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

2 Months Ago

Hi Chris, thanks for that. I sure do wish I could sing as well as those ladies. :)
this is so very lyrical mrs. Papaya:) and sad like a blues song I can hear the heavy backbeat booms of anguish in the music score dear Ana but it's not so clear that you killed him as much as he did it to himself:/ but im getting the drift of culpability is not always action in the melody line

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Ana Papaya

3 Months Ago

Thank you much Mr Bunny. :)
I just watched the Johnny Cash movie recently and heard him throughout in this, talking of killing, just to see him die...
Although yours sounds like a far more desrving cause than that.
Your last line is a stunner. Stopped me in my tracks and made me think of how there are those places that time loses its constant label.
And I know you said it's just words, but if you need an alibi...
Just sayin' 😀

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

3 Months Ago

that's a great movie. 'walk the line'?
yes, i think it goes 'i shot a man in reno'
th.. read more
Lorry

3 Months Ago

Okay, so that's code for being nowhere near Reno on the night in question, right? 😀
Ana Papaya

3 Months Ago

You got it. :)
The feel of real life and the feel of a jazz song. I like the realistic feel of the words. I knew men who were haunted by ghost of dead men. Some soldiers who saw the dirtiest parts of war. Fighting them till death. Outstanding poetry shared dear Ana.
Coyote

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

3 Months Ago

Thanks Coyote. Always appreciate your kind words and thoughts.
Coyote Poetry

2 Months Ago

Hello dear Ana and you are welcome.
I'm sure it wasn't.

Have you ever hear of a fellow named Robert Johnson?

You and I should get together someday watch all the movies they've made from Phillip Dick's books. It's not that many movies.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

3 Months Ago

Hi. I could have sworn I responded to this.
I know Robert Johnson as the Blues guitarist and .. read more
i'd kind of like to know how he died as well...i imagine what this man did, and he most likely deserved
the worst form of death...
j.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

3 Months Ago

Thanks Jacob!
This reminded me of Queen's Bohemian Rhapsody that begins, "Mama, I just killed a man.." I like the content but I might have liked more detail on how he was killed....the devil in the details and all that. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

3 Months Ago

I specifically avoided the details :)
But I appreciate the interest! Thanks for the comment!
They are nothing but a damaged creature. I call them that. They find art not in making love but in insulting their feelings. This is so deep with a perfect ending.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

3 Months Ago

Thanks much, moog!!
Brilliant pace, evocative language- a chilling slice of emotion and ice. I love it. I wonder about the need for "much" and "bit" ...I feel like they slow the flow, but that's just one rodent's opinion. Stellar work, well done!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

3 Months Ago

Thank you for checking it out!
They may just be words but harsh as they may be, it made for an interesting read.
If it was the whomever that operates this site he may have well deserved it!
good write AP
Good morn AP


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

3 Months Ago

Ha! No. It was not the owner of this site.

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