poise and pirouette

poise and pirouette

A Chapter by Ana Papaya
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it all burns
 every saccharine melody I drink
      from your lips, to my ear
    as hot as Paris in the summer rain
every sauter, plier and relever
    with grace,  I dance away
from memories of back when we...

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© 2020 Ana Papaya


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This one gets a WOW from me Ana. It tells us so much whilst keeping those memories personal and private.
Saccharine suggests false sweetness, which along with burning, suggests that it isn't heading for a happy ever after, Paris is known the world over as the city of love and romance, which certainly wasn't my experience, but they do have better PR than I do, but the wow is for yhe last line, which doesn't require words and takes the reader into their own thoughts of knowing, without knowing....if you know what I mean.
Thiscertainly has that something that I do wish the French would come up with a popular phrase for.
Elegant will have to do for now. 😀

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

11 Months Ago

🙂 thank you Lorry, for the great comment.
Elegant sounds lovely. :) I will happily accept.. read more



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I loved the poem dear Ana. The felt like a secret whisper. The words softly written and heavy with thoughts and memories. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry..
Coyote

Posted 4 Months Ago


Your title had already given me a hint this would be ironic, but then, reading your poem, you knock it out of the stratosphere, as far as showing a bitter look back at all the fancy BS we used to take for glamor or status or whatever! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Months Ago




... if I was to suggest even for a moment, that this petit offering was a little gem ... that would be a grande faux pas and understatement .. it is a peach, or a pearl of a poem and I absolutely insist you be proud of it Ana ...

... Neville

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Neville

10 Months Ago


where are all the N's when ya need one eh ... N :)
Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

:) you found one it seems.
Neville

10 Months Ago


... Yep & you got it :)
The little pink packets of "Sweet & Low" mingle so well with the blue "Equal", white sugar, and the fancy raw sugar. Like a little dance of their own, on the diner table. Waiting to be plucked by a diner taking the edge of the morning coffee.

This poem paints a profound picture. In very little words, it illustrates time. And the mention of Paris is and effective segue into the ballet. Thanks you for sharing.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

11 Months Ago

Artificial sweetener vs real... nice comparison you've drawn. Thanks much, Cory! :)
it does burn Ana, burns in the way it never goes away and at times intensifies... sometimes it makes you feel as though all that is left is the ashes of you... you drew me into these “memories” into memories of my own...

I may be nothing but ash Ana but I know a really good poem when I read it... I hope you are doing better than I did....

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

11 Months Ago

Thank you for the ever so kind comment as always.
:)
This one gets a WOW from me Ana. It tells us so much whilst keeping those memories personal and private.
Saccharine suggests false sweetness, which along with burning, suggests that it isn't heading for a happy ever after, Paris is known the world over as the city of love and romance, which certainly wasn't my experience, but they do have better PR than I do, but the wow is for yhe last line, which doesn't require words and takes the reader into their own thoughts of knowing, without knowing....if you know what I mean.
Thiscertainly has that something that I do wish the French would come up with a popular phrase for.
Elegant will have to do for now. 😀

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

11 Months Ago

🙂 thank you Lorry, for the great comment.
Elegant sounds lovely. :) I will happily accept.. read more
ooh la la ma Cherie!
Hope that means something??

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

11 Months Ago

My French is rusty but I do think it means something.
:) merci, Dave!
As hot as Paris in the summer rain. Paris is the city for scorching romance. Methinks this is a delicious memory Ana.

Chris

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

11 Months Ago

Thanks so much Chris!
Chris

11 Months Ago

You are welcome Ana. Hope you are well.
When.. we danced the light fantastic? Those few words paint such a picture, Ana Papaya, but.. is it beautiful o perhaps, a little charred? For you to know; your words really touch.

Take care, keep safe.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

11 Months Ago

It's like a beautifully grilled steak that's charred on the outside and bleeding tender within. Tha.. read more
emmajoy

11 Months Ago

What a delicious description! Smiling here. Keeping as well i can, thank you. Waving!

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